~When You Leapt

Your butterfly wings twisted 

                    by fate & obscurity

               plummeting into the grand abyss

             you took my heart with you when you leapt

                           hanging by a thread was no way to go

left behind memories, secrets and pain

         now divided by death I can't help but wonder

was there peace in your decision to fall?

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I think anyone who has had a loved one take their own life asked such questions... you will go crazy living with them unanswered, but you need to find peace by keeping them alive in your heart.

Have you ever heard "A Tout Le Monde" by Megadeth... if not check it out.

[Frieda P]

Only listened to it about a thousand times in that immediate time following the sadness....thanks Dale.

[Rebecca Buller]

Frieda, this was both touching & heartbreaking. I lost a member of my family to suicide two years ago and, while I wasn't that close with her, it was still such a shock. I don't think the "why?" can ever truly be answered. Thank you for sharing this.

[Frieda P]

Sorry Rebecca, and thanks, it's always a shock, the pain that keeps on giving those that are left behind.

[Jack...]

Beautiful, touching and filled with sorrowed questions. Though each and every question pondered can if needed be shortened to simply use the word..."Why?" Frieda, you tug on us and pull is in directions we all would rather not go, though the pathways are lined with your endless beauty, what waits at the foot of the hill this time seems to be a cavern filled with tears. Very beautiful my friend.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciate your sentiments my dear friend.

[Zahra]

Really sad and effective piece, someone's decision to lose their life to escape hardships can tore the lives of those left behind apart. Beautifully done.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much, and yes it surely does.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

This is so sad, Frieda. I don't know what to say or how I feel after knowing that your beloved one took his life... It's really heartrending.

Keep on holding to your faith so that he would have peace...
An impressive piece though covered with sadness. Keep going, Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Very kind of you Dhaye, it was my baby sister, well baby to me, she is always on my mind...much appreciate your support.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome. Oh, your sister. I thought somebody else. I'm sorry for that. Being the eldest child, I also cared so much with my brother and sister. The loss of my sister's child was that big tragedy in the family. Until now, my sister has not moved on from that misery, and that's my prayer always...to see her smiling.

[Frieda P]

I am the eldest too, very sad, sorry for your loss, the heartbreak of losing a child is insurmountable, my heart goes out to you and your family.

[Troy Henson]

When i was only 1 year old I lost my father at the age of 27 to a heart attack. He was told so many times to take care of himself but he refused. I lost him.....a void that can never be filled....
A touching and heart felt piece.

Kind Regards
Troy

[Frieda P]

Thank you Troy, much appreciate your sentiments here.

[Troy Henson]

Its not often a piece of writing touches my emotions. Well done.

[Frieda P]

That's the most a poet could ever ask for.

[Ken Simm.]

That last line. Ahhh. I can see what this is and I can't say anymore than beautiful.

[Frieda P]

Much appreciated Ken.

[Leandro Mendez]

enjoyable dark little piece :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks for reading Leandro.

[C.E.K. Nelson]

Oh my- very powerful- hit home for me in a way that can not be explained! Just a guess, but is this about suiside? The decision to fall... Into the abyss?.. Of death or of substance abuse or self absorption ?

[Frieda P]

Yes it's about suicide, thanks for your thoughts here C.E.K.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

piercing piece that allows one to cry at will, well done, good read.

[Frieda P]

Thank you Thomas.