~ Final curtain act of weeping roses

_inspired by Rene's poem, Reduce everything to Ashes

Etched your name

    in the dust of my heart's ache,

wildflower's soul strewn 

       haphazardly askew

love note tucked neatly

          written in braille tidings,

of ghostly passage's rhyme

obliging a long forgotten prayer

of yesteryear and far away,

          in your eye's pious obligations

a blue moon's 

dispirited bloom,

awakened in the shadows

             of diminished  capacity's vapors,

surrendered under the pressure

                 of afterthought's tragic loss

weeping roses

             can't breathe life's blood, 

too late for encore's last call

                      in the final curtain act

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I liked the tone of this --- Frieda...yet I had a difficult time reading with the font...I made it through and just adjusted the magnification a bit...I do see the the end caption puts this into over drive:

weeping roses
can't breathe life's blood,
too late for encore's last call
in the final curtain act

well-versed...again I only had to squint a bit to finish...and I already have four eyes...LOL...good day...and happy writing...

[Frieda P]

You're just cranky when it comes to my fonts Glen, get new glasses dear. haha I meant thanks muchly. :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I did that already...may be I need a better eye doctor...hehehe...good to read you...

[Nusquam Esse]

I actually agree with Glen on this one; the font is too hard to read... at least make it slightly larger so that the spaces between characters are more noticeable.

[MomzillaNC]

Actually, F, they're not incorrect about the font. I understand your intent to create the visual impact of red type to evoke the red rose. However, as an artist and former graphic designer who worked in print media, I can tell you that red is one of the most difficult colors to follow on white background for a body of type. I recommend you just use an illuminated letter (like you see in some large, ornate Bibles or Medieval texts) at the beginning of the prose, then continue in a black or charcoal type.

I always choose at a larger font size. Basic rules of thumb in layout, limit your fonts to only two faces (a serif font -- like Times or Palatino, and a san-serif font -- like Arial or Helvetica), and only use italics in the main body of the copy (unless your entire text is in italics; in which case, you can use italics in the title to). Save script fonts and "fun" or decorative fonts for titles in almost every instance. Smaller size type is easier to read in san-serif fonts. As for illuminated letters, I'll bet you can find some freebies online.

Something from these sites might work if that's the way you'd like to go:
http://www.magic-of-color.com/?p=2294
http://www.theenglishgroup.co.uk/blog/2014/03/03/12th-century-alphabet/
http://www.paraisoscrap.com/WebRoot/StoreES3/Shops/eb8853/4FDF/98CF/0E95/78DE/AA81/AC10/1417/C1D2/ha_581_B.jpg
http://www.yourecards.net/ecard_thumbnail/id129404/sarah-j-colemen-gives-us-a-sneek-peak-at-a-new-bernstein-_-andriulli.jpg
http://www.councell.net/illuminations/icons/letters-small/Blue%20Floral%20E%20Icon.jpg
http://lh3.ggpht.com/_hVOW2U7K4-M/SUwfVYFNvDI/AAAAAAAAviU/delK5dhknUw/s640/dhjgfnjmfhgbngfxbnfghdfg.jpg
http://media-cache-ec0.pinimg.com/236x/ab/57/67/ab5767fdf48ff8af74e92065506a87b5.jpg

[TL Boehm]

some aches never leave. This is lovely but so sad.

[Mayank]

loved the poem, loved the rhyme, very melancholic, just a little advice - increase font size.

[AprilRN1210]

what a beautiful, sad tale that is both moving in its meaning and deliverance.. as always you take my breath away... lovely ma'am..

[Avinash]

Remains of a once beautiful affair still pulls you into the memory lane. Melancholic but beautiful.

[Zakari Schmidt]

Wow this is a great write! Your style in this was almost hypnotic to me as I read, beautiful flow combined with deep seeded symbols left a smile on my face.. One for my library, for sure :D

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Wow, this is my first reading in "months" and you still are such an incredible talent. Loved this from the first two lines! Missed you, Frieda. ;)

[Nusquam Esse]

Alright, so I pretty much enjoyed every line in this one; it has your usual style, with flowing words and metaphors that coerce the reader into thinking about some small aspect of life in a new way... with enough of these small shifts in perspective, you can shift those greater conceptions. I think my favourite line was "wildflower's soul strewn haphazardly askew", because of the image it gave me in my mind. Thanks for sharing your beautiful and brilliant work as always.

[emmajoy]

' ..a blue moon's ~ dispirited bloom, awakened in the shadows ~ of .. '

Whatever and wherever you weep your words, they touch mind and heart. You tie them around thoughts then leave their whichever form of succulence for your readers to think about. And the trip of metaphors and convolutions leave us realising that there's always more between the lines - but then, there inevitably is, don't you think. More than..

[Kelly Scheppers]

...make that the far RIGHT side of the page!!!!! [ blame it on the migraine! ]

[Kelly Scheppers]

You could pen the alphabet, and make it extraordinary, Frieda! I love this font - you're right, it does lend a delicacy to your words and presentation. Sometimes, you just gotta go where your heart leads!

Oh, and a "high five" for utilizing the far left side of the page! ; )