~ Final curtain act of weeping roses

_inspired by Rene's poem, Reduce everything to Ashes

Etched your name

    in the dust of my heart's ache,

wildflower's soul strewn 

       haphazardly askew

love note tucked neatly

          written in braille tidings,

of ghostly passage's rhyme

obliging a long forgotten prayer

of yesteryear and far away,

          in your eye's pious obligations

a blue moon's 

dispirited bloom,

awakened in the shadows

             of diminished  capacity's vapors,

surrendered under the pressure

                 of afterthought's tragic loss

weeping roses

             can't breathe life's blood, 

too late for encore's last call

                      in the final curtain act

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I liked the tone of this --- Frieda...yet I had a difficult time reading with the font...I made it through and just adjusted the magnification a bit...I do see the the end caption puts this into over drive:

weeping roses
can't breathe life's blood,
too late for encore's last call
in the final curtain act

well-versed...again I only had to squint a bit to finish...and I already have four eyes...LOL...good day...and happy writing...

[Frieda P]

You're just cranky when it comes to my fonts Glen, get new glasses dear. haha I meant thanks muchly. :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I did that already...may be I need a better eye doctor...hehehe...good to read you...

[Nusquam Esse]

I actually agree with Glen on this one; the font is too hard to read... at least make it slightly larger so that the spaces between characters are more noticeable.

[MomzillaNC]

Actually, F, they're not incorrect about the font. I understand your intent to create the visual impact of red type to evoke the red rose. However, as an artist and former graphic designer who worked in print media, I can tell you that red is one of the most difficult colors to follow on white background for a body of type. I recommend you just use an illuminated letter (like you see in some large, ornate Bibles or Medieval texts) at the beginning of the prose, then continue in a black or charcoal type.

I always choose at a larger font size. Basic rules of thumb in layout, limit your fonts to only two faces (a serif font -- like Times or Palatino, and a san-serif font -- like Arial or Helvetica), and only use italics in the main body of the copy (unless your entire text is in italics; in which case, you can use italics in the title to). Save script fonts and "fun" or decorative fonts for titles in almost every instance. Smaller size type is easier to read in san-serif fonts. As for illuminated letters, I'll bet you can find some freebies online.

Something from these sites might work if that's the way you'd like to go:
http://www.magic-of-color.com/?p=2294
http://www.theenglishgroup.co.uk/blog/2014/03/03/12th-century-alphabet/
http://www.paraisoscrap.com/WebRoot/StoreES3/Shops/eb8853/4FDF/98CF/0E95/78DE/AA81/AC10/1417/C1D2/ha_581_B.jpg
http://www.yourecards.net/ecard_thumbnail/id129404/sarah-j-colemen-gives-us-a-sneek-peak-at-a-new-bernstein-_-andriulli.jpg
http://www.councell.net/illuminations/icons/letters-small/Blue%20Floral%20E%20Icon.jpg
http://lh3.ggpht.com/_hVOW2U7K4-M/SUwfVYFNvDI/AAAAAAAAviU/delK5dhknUw/s640/dhjgfnjmfhgbngfxbnfghdfg.jpg
http://media-cache-ec0.pinimg.com/236x/ab/57/67/ab5767fdf48ff8af74e92065506a87b5.jpg

[Einstein Noodle]

weeping roses can not breath life's blood for sure .. but their thorns can certainly draw it .. i am a sucker for a blue moon ;) ...
i feel so sad!:(

love and peace dear graceful eloquent Italian Frieda! love and peace!
E.

[Frieda P]

Who isn't E, thanks so much, don't be sad, it's just a poem, do the happy dance with me. :) love ya! xo

[Einstein Noodle]

i beg to disagree my love! no such thing as just a poem :))
but i will dance .. we can dance in weeping and in joy .. right?! ;)

[Frieda P]

What I meant was I wasn't sad when I wrote it, would be honored. :) xo

[John Alexander McFadyen]

More dying swan than Peacock this time my lady. This felt such a sad dirge with grace and eloquence.

[Frieda P]

Blame Rene, he started it, thanks so much John....

[kublakhan27]

As always, you find new and unique way to pierce my heart love...yes, every rose has its thorn, and there were emotional thorns scattered through this piece that strung me...the specter of loss is omnipresent and always loom in your work as much as it pains me...'weeping roses can't breathe life's blood'...I think that was the line that did it for me here, though every single line you write is worthy of a quote...there is never a wasted word or a word out of place...you have an impeccable gift for flow, and how to unfurl a piece to achieve maximum emotional effect...you have this poetry thing down pat pretty good Mrs.R :) xo

[Frieda P]

I knew you were going to say that. ;) Thanks so much Benji, your reviews always make my day. :) xo

[kublakhan27]

I don't know if that's a good or bad thing...I'm either becoming too predictable, or you just know me that well ;) Always a pleasure love :) xo

[MomzillaNC]

Oh! What sadness… and the music is the perfect accompaniment. You could just about set the words of the poem to that music. It actually made me a little misty.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Momzilla.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"a blue moon's dispirited bloom"

wish i had come up with that line...

such sadness in the ashes of the ache of the rose....
beautifully tragic poem...

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much jacob, means a lot...

[Lily Mae]

What can I say? Your ability to pen your emotions is luscious. We all feel the moment and it finds a place inside ourselves where we too once felt this... Bittersweet...xoxo

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Lily Mae, your words humble me. xo

[Lyn Anderson]

I have to admit, I almost didn't click on it. Okay, I like it, but I don't, you know? Yes, you know.:)

[Frieda P]

Yes I know, payback's a b***h and all that jazz. :)

[redflutterby]

Heart ache lingers with us for a very long time as if it is literally etched upon our heart. Theres some amazing lines in here and you always amaze me with how concise and compact your verse can be. Unlike myself...there isn't one word wasted. Each one packs a powerful effect that leaves the reader feeling breathless. Lovely...x

[Frieda P]

Why thank you so much Red, that's quite the compliment. xo

[Rene Salinas]

I am glad I saw Glen's comment for all those that need the font to be bigger like me after years of looking at a screen. Ctrl + , maximises and Ctrl - the opposite. Lately I have come to understand the Frieda writes with words that have lived. I am unsure but I guess when she writes she re - lives the situations. It comes so full of meaning and intention that it evokes silence in me. Surrendering under pressure and of after thoughts tragic loss left me thinking. It is a very intimate array of feelings.

So elegantly put though.

Thankyou

[Frieda P]

Thanks, jazz'd you enjoyed Rene, since you were part of the inspiration in your cremation.....

[Rene Salinas]

Double the credit then ? Nahh Frieda honestly the weight of your words brings about a different kind of feeling greatly enjoyed

[Frieda P]

Still the inspiration was there, where the muse takes us is another thing entirely....thanks again Rene.