~ Final curtain act of weeping roses

_inspired by Rene's poem, Reduce everything to Ashes

Etched your name

    in the dust of my heart's ache,

wildflower's soul strewn 

       haphazardly askew

love note tucked neatly

          written in braille tidings,

of ghostly passage's rhyme

obliging a long forgotten prayer

of yesteryear and far away,

          in your eye's pious obligations

a blue moon's 

dispirited bloom,

awakened in the shadows

             of diminished  capacity's vapors,

surrendered under the pressure

                 of afterthought's tragic loss

weeping roses

             can't breathe life's blood, 

too late for encore's last call

                      in the final curtain act

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I liked the tone of this --- Frieda...yet I had a difficult time reading with the font...I made it through and just adjusted the magnification a bit...I do see the the end caption puts this into over drive:

weeping roses
can't breathe life's blood,
too late for encore's last call
in the final curtain act

well-versed...again I only had to squint a bit to finish...and I already have four eyes...LOL...good day...and happy writing...

[Frieda P]

You're just cranky when it comes to my fonts Glen, get new glasses dear. haha I meant thanks muchly. :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

I did that already...may be I need a better eye doctor...hehehe...good to read you...

[Nusquam Esse]

I actually agree with Glen on this one; the font is too hard to read... at least make it slightly larger so that the spaces between characters are more noticeable.

[MomzillaNC]

Actually, F, they're not incorrect about the font. I understand your intent to create the visual impact of red type to evoke the red rose. However, as an artist and former graphic designer who worked in print media, I can tell you that red is one of the most difficult colors to follow on white background for a body of type. I recommend you just use an illuminated letter (like you see in some large, ornate Bibles or Medieval texts) at the beginning of the prose, then continue in a black or charcoal type.

I always choose at a larger font size. Basic rules of thumb in layout, limit your fonts to only two faces (a serif font -- like Times or Palatino, and a san-serif font -- like Arial or Helvetica), and only use italics in the main body of the copy (unless your entire text is in italics; in which case, you can use italics in the title to). Save script fonts and "fun" or decorative fonts for titles in almost every instance. Smaller size type is easier to read in san-serif fonts. As for illuminated letters, I'll bet you can find some freebies online.

Something from these sites might work if that's the way you'd like to go:
http://www.magic-of-color.com/?p=2294
http://www.theenglishgroup.co.uk/blog/2014/03/03/12th-century-alphabet/
http://www.paraisoscrap.com/WebRoot/StoreES3/Shops/eb8853/4FDF/98CF/0E95/78DE/AA81/AC10/1417/C1D2/ha_581_B.jpg
http://www.yourecards.net/ecard_thumbnail/id129404/sarah-j-colemen-gives-us-a-sneek-peak-at-a-new-bernstein-_-andriulli.jpg
http://www.councell.net/illuminations/icons/letters-small/Blue%20Floral%20E%20Icon.jpg
http://lh3.ggpht.com/_hVOW2U7K4-M/SUwfVYFNvDI/AAAAAAAAviU/delK5dhknUw/s640/dhjgfnjmfhgbngfxbnfghdfg.jpg
http://media-cache-ec0.pinimg.com/236x/ab/57/67/ab5767fdf48ff8af74e92065506a87b5.jpg

[Cory Barrett]

Frieda, with every ready of one of your writes i become more in tune with the style that is yours. Each and everyone expose another scar, and other message in braille, another... well another door.

[Jon Roggie]

For some reason, these words draw me back. I keep reading them. Jon.

[Ashira Macy]

I am going to have to check Rene's poem out, if it inspired such a lovely piece.

surrendered under the pressure
of afterthought's tragic loss

These lines were fascinating to me. Too often so we say that hindsight is 20/20 and we rethink our actions, wishing that we could have had things play out differently. But if we were to surrender to afterthought would that mean trying to go back and do things differently? I feel that would take away our humanity a bit. But perhaps I just opened up a completely separate can of worms.

[Lauriegirl]

This is definitely a poem where you shine brightly .. I know you must of enjoyed writing it. I can feel it through every phrase..

[Fran Marie]

weeping roses

can't breathe life's blood"

love that line ...a lovely penned piece ...filled with deep emotions ...beautifully expressed..

[A. Amos]

brilliant write and love the touch of Jill Tracy...pure magic my friend!

[Jack Wolfe]

After reading his . . . it got the mind turning. I'm glad I came through and took a look at your as well. A very eloquent piece strapped with keen word choices and well placed metaphors, 'weeping roses can't breath life's blood'. Beautiful. The only complaint I would have is the small text, a bit hard on the eyes.

[Frieda P]

I'm thrilled you did too Jack, thanks so much. So, I've been told, but it hardly looks small to me, when I tried the next font size, it looked huge...I wanted it to be more delicate.

[R Smith]

another amazing poem from your pen dripping in the blood of love running red in rose petals, etch my name in the dust of your words anytime

[Frieda P]

Love your review Richard, thanks muchly my friend....

[R Smith]

always welcome

[Lydia Shutter]

A bittersweet beauty of a write, Frieda. An elegant lament...straight from that gorgeous heart of yours! Lydi**

[Frieda P]

Awh thanks for your sweet words Lydikey, means a lot! x

[Matching Socks]

Weeping roses, how beautiful but sad this poem is, for all that might have been but will never be.

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Ana Sophia.