She Stares.

A fashion boutique down this corner,

Women stare in such fluttery wonder,

As he steps foot, this suited man,

Handsome smile, a bouquet in hand,

A lovely smile, she stares with intent,

Oh this man who comes by, again and again,

He has taken her heart bit by bit,

Such a romantic gesture, how intimate,

He stares into this silent woman's eyes,

Not for long, for he passes her by,

He hands the roses to a young clerk,

Standing by the register, everyday at work,

The silent woman's smile can't sway,

Though the pain can never go away,

The man you love has gone to another,

No tears, she can't surrender,

Such sadness, she can never shove,

Oh the poor thing;

A mannequin in-love.

Reviews

[GlacialStars]

o: ghee....golly. We have like a double effect thing going on. You made us think that it was a woman and then you reveal that it was actually a mannequin...An inanimate object that you gave human feelings too. Great personification. But this also can be seen as the opposite! That it's the woman that's immobile and simply gazing, hoping one day that he will come to her and then having her heart broken when its another that gets the flowers but anyway xD Great poem (sorry for babbling, i tend to do that)

[Jem Sagcal]

You don't need to apologize for that HAHA.
Thank you very much for the review!

[smilempsn]

well that one had a perfect unusual...unthinkable ending..
I liked this piece.. ^-^

[SyberRose]

I loved the surprise ending...so glad I found this poem today. Thank you for posting.

SyberRose

[Jem Sagcal]

Thank you very much!

[Nami Machae]

oh wow o.o I didnt expect that. It was very well done :) I really enjoyed this

[Salar Majak]

awwww i feel bad for her!!!!, you discribed the scene so simply that i thought i was standing there watching them, i really like this, it expresses the pain you have when knowing that some one you love just doesn't cares any more, thanks for the opportunity to read this.

[WingsToFly]

Nice poem, nice visuals.

[GJ]

Beautifully written :-)

[Persona]

Well I quite like it. Nice rhyming scheme, good rhythm, sweet descriptions

[Sid]

Very interesting write, I really liked the ending; the way you gave those emotions to the mannequin is well, quite brilliant actually and the flow is great too...great write!!

[Pax]

through this poem i remember the movie mannequin ... the mannequin there came to life... it was a good romantic comedy movie just like this poem just a little serious....hehe..
great job kabayan!

[Jem Sagcal]

I've never heard of that movie, actually :O I'll try and watch it our of curiosity!
Thank you for the review, Kuya :D

[Pax]

walang ano man...

[Tex]

YES!

Now that is what I was talking about. Very good job. I just love this Write in Poem style. Beautifully done. this is really a remarkable write. I love this piece. Keep up the great work.

Nick

[Jem Sagcal]

I really appreciate your feedback on this, Sir Nick!
Thank you!