discernment

discernment

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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05/2011

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you are my casualty, your eradication
my sojourn in your country 
has brought about my descent 

falling from your smothering embrace
your pallet of a thousand stakes
my surface dies underneath your taste

this com-mixture was difficult to fathom
but I will believe in you now, now that its over
now that its murder 

© 2014 joshua deathdealer


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I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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WOW!!... I am so feeling this piece, Joshua...(having to deal with this very issue)

Sometimes it angers me when people can be so callus to others...

In the end, they are overwrought with their own insensitivities...

Excellent write!~xoxo~

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

joshua deathdealer

9 Years Ago

Thank you Robbie!! It's good to see you and yes I have learned this the hard way. It is an older poe.. read more
Started strong and ended with a murder. That is the way to do it! I liked the gentle intricacy in this poem, it caresses with beautiful imagery and vocabulary, but doesn't throw you down into a whirlwind of unnecessary information. Very well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

reminds me of a girl I fell in love with what seems so many life times ago so sorrowful and touching thank ya brother and ya no longer need to feel the way the was your undoing yesterday peace be yours

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A lot of emotion flowed through such a short poem. I enjoyed it. But this one seems different from the other poems that I've read from you. The others I've read were of self awareness and moving on. This one is about the chaos of two souls. Cause and effect. J'adore! -Ian

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

succinct and strongly penned.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like it

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I felt dumb to see words I didnt understand XP but thats ok. Great write

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

powerful, great lines, just enough impact, without pushing too hard.. very nice (: -s

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the last line of this poem and I enjoyed the entire poem. There's nothing better to me than a short poem with a lot of meaning. "You are my casualty, your eradication" strong and powerful opening line. I couldn't help but think of total chaos and destruction. And cause and effect. Very good poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Intent defines in ways little else will...

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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