Dreaming of you

I lay in bed
quiet and still
my mind seems to wonder
to the thought of you
i can see you face
in my minds eye
we lay in a meadow
in each others arms
warmth envelops us
as we watch each others
every movements
i can feel your hands
touch me ever so gently
you lips caress mine
we are in love
and it will never leave us
we are our air for each other
we are our life
and water
we are everything we need
to survive this life
we are truly meant to be.

Reviews

[Chris]

"I can see you face" you? - or your?
"minds" - mind's?
"Others" x2 or other's?
"movements" - movement?

Sam - if I may... this has all the possibilities going for it... a woman thinking of her - special other... evening... romantic... the possibility of heat. To express the "heat" sometime you need to seperate the thoughts to give the reader/listener room to develop that heat inside. Breath breaks, eye breaks, anything that will enhace your thoughts will help you better express.

[Philip Smith]

I said that once in my life. Or similar. you told the truth and with feeling, maybe to short on such a "touchy subject" I like it