Box Rain Dark

The Saga of my undying love.

Spirit, light, shade and dark

I am mysteriously in love with you

 

                         The sun, the moon and the stars

                         I pray to the heaven above that you are the one

 

Hands, kisses, and hugs.

I wish tomorrow will come with promises of real love

 

Rainbow, jewel stone, and fire

Passionate love we both enjoy and cherish

 

Storms, big waves and earthquakes

I’m wondering if we could build a life together

 

                            Space, empty room and box

                            Now my life has no direction

 

Clouds, rain and tears

Now I have lost you

 

Box…Rain…Dark Goodbye my love

Author's Note

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

I love what you did with this poem. Nature just naturally calls out to me in ways that nothing else can. Whether it be in connection to spiritual things or love, nature feels honest. Great title. Each three word choices has me stopping to receive from it.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Oh my, I got lost in these words of beauty my friend, I so do love your seasonal wording in this poem, "Storms, big waves and earthquakes I’m wondering if we could build a life together" as I know Asia is familiar with this pain, many times, but it could be read also so metaphorically brilliant, as in love there are those up's and downs... this write touched me to the bone... auch, that ending.... ;) thank you my friend.


- Elisa

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Elisa, your words is always an inspiration to me, thank you my friend for your time reading my work. :)

You're most welcome, so are yours... you're gifted!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) thanks again my friend.

[stephen dillon]

gifted indeed

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Step for dropping :)

[Mockingbird]

i like the theme of unrequited love. it's so tragic. i like the way you present the imagery. conveys the heartbreak of the lover accurately. great job.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for reading my work, I appreciate your words it is an inspiration to me. Thanks again.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

When I write the word goodbye, I always cheer myself up, 'cause it's really heartbreaking. I don't know why in this piece, I felt more than what I feel when I think of my own heartache.
I don't know your story, but seems I can feel your pain and I can see your tears in this poem. Maybe, you just had it again- the best music for this. I like it.
Thanks for sharing this.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks for reading Dhaye, Thanks for believing, this story is a true story.

[KAOlmsted]

First, I forgot my speakers were on and the music startled me *laugh*

I really like the flow of this piece, Marc, because it quite often goes this way. It starts out so hopeful, and matures into something meaningful, and then dissolves into a painful ending. You've captured it beautifully. Thank you so much for sharing your lovely voice with us.

-kimmer

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Kimm for the wonderful words. I value it more, thanks for believing in this piece.

[KAOlmsted]

It is a valuable piece. My pleasure ;-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks again :)

[Gerald Parker]

No, don't thank me. This poem is too soppy for me. Sorry.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

It is ok only you, :) the problem if all don't like it, just kidding but still thanks.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Sorry Kim Mr. Gerald mistakenly write here lol :)

[KAOlmsted]

No worries, I always get such a thrill when he confirms all over again what a priggish a*s he is xD Holy cats, did I just say that? ;-)

[Gerald Parker]

OMG Am I a priggish a*s?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :)

[KAOlmsted]

;-)

[Gerald Parker]

We need a poem about priggish asses.

[Rita L. Sev]

Sweet, lovely, and poignant. As I read your poem, I was thinking "how wonderful to have a love like this." Then reality - love lost, coming suddenly as it often does. A beautiful piece!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Rita, I really appreciate your time reading my work. Thanks a lot.

[Eddie Phillips]

Sweet and intriguing as always.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Bro. you always support me :)

[emmajoy]

' Hands, kisses, and hugs. ~ I wish tomorrow will come with promises of real love~~
Rainbow, jewel stone, and fire ~ Passionate love we both enjoy and cherish.. '

A beautiful piece of writing even though fading from happiness and hope to a sad goodbye. Life and love is like that, goes from light to dark; guess we need to keep on searching, discover a way of finding yet more lovely phrases. It happens.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Em, your words is an inspiration :) Thanks for your time reading my work.

[Singing Bird]

Well hello Marc, this is SingingBird and I've just read your poem Box Rain Dark, and thoroughly enjoyed it. Unusual and beautiful way of writing . Your graduation of build up during the relationship brilliant and the alternation of light and darker stanzas gave it even more depth, ( not that it needed it!) Have been thoroughly entertained by your beautifully set up author's note too. Now I don't want to leave.
This poem will draw me back to read it again and again. Pilamia.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) I am happy to hear that :) Thank you my friend. Your word such inspiration always. Take care :)

[Singing Bird]

Thankyou, you take care too.

[Sami Khalil]

" The sun, the moon and the stars

I pray to the heaven above that you are the one."
A very nice poem. I like those lines the most...:)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Brother, glad you like it :) thanks for your time reading my work.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Pete Langley]

I get the feeling you were trying to convey the immediacy and urgency of your emotions - unadorned - in this piece, Marc. I think you may have succeeded in this - but the music of poetry was missing for me, I`m afraid. P.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir Pete I am just testing the water in this piece. Thanks for your time reading it.