Box Rain Dark

The Saga of my undying love.

Spirit, light, shade and dark

I am mysteriously in love with you

 

                         The sun, the moon and the stars

                         I pray to the heaven above that you are the one

 

Hands, kisses, and hugs.

I wish tomorrow will come with promises of real love

 

Rainbow, jewel stone, and fire

Passionate love we both enjoy and cherish

 

Storms, big waves and earthquakes

I’m wondering if we could build a life together

 

                            Space, empty room and box

                            Now my life has no direction

 

Clouds, rain and tears

Now I have lost you

 

Box…Rain…Dark Goodbye my love

Author's Note

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

I love what you did with this poem. Nature just naturally calls out to me in ways that nothing else can. Whether it be in connection to spiritual things or love, nature feels honest. Great title. Each three word choices has me stopping to receive from it.

[Junert]

Such talents. It's adorable, to me.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks my sister :) you always support me :) thanks for the review.

[Junert]

You are truly gifted.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) really thanks Sister

[Trigorin]

Not bad. I like your triune theme and I think it works fairly well in this. Well-written, and you use some very clear imagery here. Well done.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Trigorin your honest review is always a factor why I am still writing. Thanks for your time reading my work.

[dave]

I really like the contrasting colors of
"Rainbow, jewel stone, and fire
Passionate love we both enjoy and cherish

Storms, big waves and earthquakes
I’m wondering if we could build a life together"
I think that you did a really good job (and do so throughout a lot of your works, I might add) of painting a picture with only few words. You pick the right words, though, and can tie together entire scenes in as short as four words. You never cease to impress me, Marc. I'm sorry I can't provide any criticism, its just your poems are too good. You have some serious word skills.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hi Dave your words is an inspiration, thank you so much for believing and adoring my work. I appreciate it big time.

[Frieda P]

Sounds as though you set up house together, hoping that happily ever after would come visit...and you only got the rain and empty boxes, not to mention a broken heart. Shades of love in this, didn't expect it go dark at the end though...simple and to the point, the pitfalls of relationships and our expectations.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Frie :) you got it! thanks for your time always reading my work. :)

[Frieda P]

My pleasure...you still stuck on this woman?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

hahahah :) not anymore I said goodbye :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Good night Frie, I will sleep now its 1 Am now. See yah tomorrow. God bless.

[Frieda P]

Ok, I thought it was one of those continuing sagas.... ;-)

[Frieda P]

Sleep well, domani ;-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) heheh no more night I know you will stay awake hehehe nyt frie.

[icelandicblue]

I like the use of light, dark and color in this piece. They are very effective in building imagery and mood.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ice, glad you like :) actually I am hesitant how the writers will react with this piece thanks for the review.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

I want an honest review :) you are free to criticize my work. Thanks

[Jem Sagcal]

Whilst reading, I honestly thought it would end up as sweet as how it began. I loved how I was greeted with a twist. From sweet, adoring words, to lines filled with sadness and pain.

I loved that shift of feeling I received after reading your poem, Sir. I very much enjoyed this piece.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Sir :) Thank you for your time reading my work, glad you like it.

[Jem Sagcal]

I am no Sir, but a female actually. Hahaha.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Sorry lol :) Thanks Jem :)