Earthquake

Mountain Fuji roars

Cracks Tokyo house's wooden floor

Hiroshi wide awake

 

Reviews

[dave]

Again with the imagery! As I said, I'm not familiar with haikus so I can't justifiably critique them, but I really have to commend you for being so consistently awesome. You always put the reader into these worlds you create with so few words, in even as few that make up a haiku. Really great.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks :) Brother you are always my inspiration. :)

[Ency Bearis]

a well descriptive Haiku greatly done

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks again Ency :) glad you like it.

[Sethnicity]

It's Good, I do wish the last line was more encompassing of all of the people... Yet, never-mind the will of the critic and stick with it.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Seth love your words it inspire me :)

[Jack...]

Indeed, this is nice.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Mr. Jack thanks a lot :) for kind words.

[Holly Mason]

short and decisive-love it
wide awake yes
a natural disaster written in a few words
good job and thank you for sharing much!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Holly you are always an inspiration thanks a lot. :)

[s y e]

Short but says alot, nice write, Marc!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks N.H glad you like :)

[s y e]

welcome, anytime :)

[Carnation]

Quick yet tells the tale well. Good job!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Angel :) I appreciate your review all the time.

[gombeggar]

very well done

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Gom. always appreciate your review :)

[Rita L. Sev]

This short verse really says it all. Wonderfully written, Marc!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ms. Rita, though i am afraid writing Haiku, thanks for your encouragement. It helps me a lot!

[Rita L. Sev]

As I said to my class yesterday, Do not be afraid of Haiku! It is a form wonderful in its simplicity, speaking volumes as you have done here.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks again, you really an inspiration for a new writer like me. :) Thanks a lot.

[Rita L. Sev]

You're very welcome! :)

[Pax]

oh, I heard about it in the news... a sad event!
another powerful haiku my friend...
I like this kabayan...
it speaks much!
i think your loving haiku now ;)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol yeah I love it Pax :) thanks for reading :) Domo Arigato!

[Pax]

oh.... you know also japanese... that's great, your most welcome :)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

heheh yes my sister and her family living in Tokyo :) that's why i learned some words. Thanks again.

[Pax]

that's nice...to hear... i really wanted to visit tokyo someday... have you gone there kabayan?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Not yet its cold can't stand in cold weather.

[Pax]

really.... may winter time ata dyan sa DUbia diba?

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Sobra ang lamig sa Japan ang lamig sa middle east di pa masyado.

[Pax]

oh yes i see the difference... kasi ganun rin yung sa ate ko... doon sa Holland... nag negative nga yung degs...eh...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Oo nga europe yun eh doon grabe din ang lamig :)

[Pax]

pero kaya mo yan.... i had experienced very cold weather.... kaya rin naman pala.... may heater naman yan sila... so i think magiging ok ka lang doon...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol palaging nag lilindol doon hehehe

[Pax]

why are you worrying... lol... visit lang naman... as if doon ka mag tatagal... dream ko kasing makapunta ng japan and see the wonderful sakura tree...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol oo maganda yung tree na yun at pati ang apple walang maka pag much sa fuji green apple masarap, juicy at saka crisp when you bite.

[Pax]

hahaha.... ngayon napunta na tayo sa pag kain...lol...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

hhhaha oo nga :)

[Mike Emil]

where is gojira??? HAI!!!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol Hai, moshi moshi :) Godzilla destroyed hhehehe

[Mike Emil]

destroyah detroyed
gojira lives on!!! HAI!!!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Yes Doremon kills Godzilla

[Mike Emil]

gojira lives
only toho can kill gojira
the americans tried with that mathew brodrick film but gojira survived!!! HAI!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) I will watch that :)