Indigo

I don't know why I love playing with the sky so much :3

The sky was caramelized,

to produce a discerning mirage on its skin.

The breeze was crispy:

it added a fierce flavor to the scenario.

 

Mouth of that ravenous seashore was filled

with layers of licit ocean.

It was not a vanilla reflection,

it rather had the skin of tender sky.

 

I tried to make a drawing of their subtle conversation.

With a brittle heart, I sighed.

Damn! It was heavy.

Reviews

[¿]

Do you love to see the indigo sky? I love it when the sky seems so clear without any cloud obstacles and it feels like as if the sky reaches somewhere more higher than it is...and the blue colour of it gets deeper....but can't look at that scene for too long since it hurts my eyes and neck....but I love to gaze at that! (Being silly, no? )
I actually love the first two lines of the second stanza...who else could paint it that way like you did!....I'll tell you why i feel the oceans are really illicit, because they can and do invade any place and connect to thousands of rivers....and none can stand against them....we've let them roam so free!....
Oh you made me say so much today.... I literally thank you for writing this....
Be blessed and cool and safe and happy, always ;)

[moog-drika]

I barely get to look at the sky because you know, half of the urban stuffs ends up covering it. And living around in such places where you see nothing but building is so painful that it's hard to evem express. Seems like you got all the opportunity to enjoy the essence of nature. This makes me miss my old times. at least I used to get enough time to spend with such beauties. However, you made me say about a lot of things too haha. and Thanks so much for your interpretation. I genuinely loved it. :'D

[¿]

Dhaka! Been there 3 years ago...my goodness, I was sweating in the car even though twas December month :( ...I can feel your pain totally...
For now, you're welcome ;)

[rashmi]

This is such a beautiful write up! Absolutely in love with it

[moog-drika]

Umm, well are you talking about the comment or the poetry? Haha

[rashmi]

Poetry ofcourse 😊

[moog-drika]

Haha thank you so much ❤️❤️❤️

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Damn! This is vivid! Truly, I love your imagination here! The sky being caramelized had this warm effect over me while reading...I love how you play with words and imagery :))

[moog-drika]

Happy to hear that it stirred up your mind with a warm effect. ;)
Thanks a bunch for those positive words. It means a lot. :'D

[barleygirl]

This is awesome imagery & originality. I am mesmerized by the morning sky & I could write something different about it every day. But in all my thoughts, I never thought of using the word "caramelized" to describe the sky for example. This kind of brilliant word-crafting really sparks me to reach further in my word choices. You do an exquisite job of personifying the sea & the sky & describing their subtle conversation -- this is top-notch imagination! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[moog-drika]

Exploring others imaginations does give you a lot of benefits I think. I'm a low-key reader and I get mesmerized by the way thinkers craft their visions through words and this is how I get to expand mine for my word choices like you said.
And thanks so much for all the positive words. The review has already given me the vibe of how much you liked the piece. I'm super obliged.
*hugs and hearts*

[Onlyme]

Oh my moog-drika, you sure do. Hit the point of explosive, exquisite masterpieces of poetry. That is vivid, colourful, powerful and amazing. Bravo.

[moog-drika]

That is extremely sweet of you hun! I am thrilled to have such a positive review and so glad you loved it. Thanks a bunch love. It means a lot.
*hearts*

[Onlyme]

my sheer pleasure sweetheart. Look forward to the next great read from you. hugs. Dawn.

[Chris Shaw]

Your posted image is fabulous. I also have a bit of a love affair with the sky and all it's moods particularly when I am at the coast. I really liked your opening stanza. All good wishes moog-drika.

Chris

[moog-drika]

Coastal areas have a special factor that happens to give you all the positive vibes. If I would have lived around such places, I would have penned down more about the moods of the sky. Thanks a lot anyway for loving the piece. It means a lot. :'D

[Leslie Philibert]

Enjoyed this. what you do well here is to present an original extended metaphor, this is written very well.

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for putting your thoughts about the piece. I'm extremely obliged.

[wordman]

the sky is gods movie screen,it tells all,shows all

[moog-drika]

whoa, that felt deep. :'D Thanks a lot :D

[wordman]

my pleasure

[likhon]

That was heavy indeed! And beautiful as you are

[wordman]

you are kind,thank you