Chapter 6

A warrior born from a promise.

Many years ago I had a dream, a dream that almost felt real and in this dream I made a world that was at war with its self in so many ways. And every time I woke up for this dream, something weird would happen.

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The hut in Skier,

Kahime was sleeping in a small bed that her feet suck out of, while the boy sits their staring at her waiting until she wakes.

“I’ll protect you,” the boy says to himself, she slowly wakes and as she does so you can see the boy’s face light up like he was getting a gift.

“Good Moring,” Kahime says stretching,

“Good Moring, are you hungry?” the boy asks,

“Yeah, how about we get so fish from the tree.” She says putting on some shoes,

“Sure, but you can stay here I’ll get them.” The boy say walking out the door, Kahime sits down

“Maybe, I should get so juice from the dog.” She says to herself, she stands up and goes outside. She can see the boy looking at her while she goes outside. He keeps smiling at her as he put the fish down from the red tree. Just as she gets ready to milk the dog

“BANG,” a gunshot echoes through the trees.

“This way men,” a man yells. The boy quickly drops the fish and drags Kahime inside,

“Just keep quiet and they won’t find us,” the boy says hiding them under the table. A group of guards tear up the place and kill the many animals nearby,

“She got to be here somewhere,” one of the men says. He goes inside the hut and sees them, he smiles walking towards them. The boy runs at him and tries to hit him, but the guard just hits him over the head and knows him out. The guard grabs Kahime and drags her outside screaming and kicking.

“I won’t do it, I won’t go back.” Kahime says somehow getting free, then a cloud goes under her feet. It climbs up her body and teleport her back to Earth.

When the boy wakes up, no one is in sight.

“I couldn’t keep my promise,” he says grab the necklace she gave him, “But I will find you even if it means going into hell.” He says with his eyes glowing with hate.

8 years later,

In the First Skier castle (Merlin), two young men guard the royal tressure in the dungeons,

 “Hey Shaka, how did we end up doing this work, I mean we have the skills to take on the future king.” One of them says, Shaka stares at him

“Who cares, the sooner we get this done the sooner I can go home.” Shaka say with a blunt face, another man walks towards them, his bird holding a white paper bag.

“I brought you something,” he says giving the bag to Shaka

“Thanks Hachiman,” Shaka says getting a sandwich out of the bag.

“How come you gave him food and not me,” the other says. Hachiman just smiles, then a man in black sabs him in the neck. Hachiman and Shaka get they’re weapons ready,

“Watch out their Scarlet Ninja’s” Shaka say getting ready to attack with his spear.

“Black knifes wright,” Hachiman says smiling “Stand down Shaka I can handle this,” Shaka sits down. Hachiman walks wright up to the Ninja and as the Ninja sabs him nothing happens. “There’s only one thing that can kill me, and I don’t know what it is,” he says cutting the Ninja’s head off.  

“Well were done here,” Shaka says walking off with Hachiman.

 

In the Second Skier castle (Scarlet),

A young man sits in his throne with a crystal ball on one of the arm, one the other is a chess board with some pieces missing. The man has a kind face and wears black and red cloths. In the crystal ball Tanshin is talking to him

“Have you killed everyone on the list,” the young man asks

“No, Sphire is the last one.” He says looking at his the young king, the king smile.

“Good return home soon, I have another mission for you,” He replies smiling. “Soon, I just have to wait a few more weeks and we’ll begin.” He says putting what seem to be a red Knight on the field.    

Author's Note

terrible grammar

Reviews

[Dominique]

I like this but idk how the storyline is woking out so far i like how on earth, all the kids are running away to Shelbyville but this world... it seems off and rotten.

[DC Patterson]

I second your self assessment on grammar, and raise you the issue of spelling LOL

Your opening line, especially "in this dream I made a world that was at war with its self in so many ways" was brilliant - that offered so much promise, painted so much opportunity, and revealed your talent.

You were going somewhere with the description of the way the boy looked at the girl - I can see your ideals shining through. "you can see the boy’s face light up like he was getting a gift" was luminous and sweetly scented.

You can create little moments with pathos and drama - but I am hoping to see you attempt something with more endurance than a TV commercial.

Also, if you know your grammar etc is broken, why not respect your readers by taking a couple of minutes to read your own work and fix the obvious mistakes. That will keep us reading, and remove the clouds obscuring your beauty.

[Weeping Willow]

I try to read them as much as i can but sometimes I can't see the mistakes in front of me. It's part of the reason why my sister says I would never be able to write a book. But thank you again, I'm going to see if one of my friends or sister can help with the things I can't pick up.

[DC Patterson]

Don't let your sister read them again. You can write, but she can't see it. Every best selling author has an editor - no one can do this without an extra set of eyeballs :) Keep it up