Weeping Eyes

The vacant look in her ocean eyes

Gazing up at star-speckled skies…

She sings,

But will never weep.

She closes her eyes,

But never finds sleep.

 

The vacant look in her lover’s eyes,

Star-speckled night skies…

His eyes are open,

But he forever sleeps.

He never sings,

But never weeps.

Reviews

[Guilt]

I felt a moment where two people are there together, but at the same time not there together. Not sure if I made sense with that. Like a conflicting temperature of a room that gives you shivers...

[SyberRose]

Lovely write indeed...:)

[Ms. Gabbi]

I love this poem, It's dark and cute. good job

[Sami Khalil]

Nicely written poem...:)

[once in love]

wow, what a wonderful poem.

[Acer]

Nicely written.

[Acer]

Nicely written.

[Beccy]

Love unreciprocated and eyes that never see are hard to bear.

A deep and moving poem.

Beccy.

[Fantasygirl46]

Wow Very deep nice job :)

[RachelReaper]

this flowed smoothly as you read it, like you put some time and effort into finding just the right words to fit where. You did nice with this, great job.