Rain on me

Rain on me

A Chapter by YumnaKay
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Experimental. Sensual write...

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Rain on me, your azure eyes 

together we experience, a blitheful feeling; tantalizing ... 
I see stars crinkle around the corner of your eyes 
when my virgin lips breathe out your name... 
saturated; your vastness falls in circles; pounding.
We are oblivious -- to the existence of the universe we inhabit as

your azure eyes rain on me...



© 2017 YumnaKay



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I know you are much too young to know Quadrophenia Rock Opera by The Who, but your lovely poem reminds me of one of the songs. Lyrical, sensual, ethereal- The first line is amazing"Rain on me "your azure eyes"- stunning. Good rhythm and flow and musicality. If you expanded this, it would be a great song...Love this!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

I'll be sure to check it out then :)
Thank you so much for appreciating, Annette. I'll try t.. read more



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A lovely, cute and very engaging write Yumna...
"virgin lips" hmm, interesting :DD
Well done, keep it up! :))


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YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Thank you, Shaan. Glad you like it 😊
I will say one thing... Your presentation style couples quite nicely with the romantic sense of writing... I liked it, good job.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

That's a lovely compliment. Thank you for appreciating, D. Glad you like it 😊
Silente

1 Week Ago

Aye, no problemo... Have you thought of using this style for a suspense type poem/story? Could be in.. read more
YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Suspense? Hmm interesting idea. I'll think about it ;) thanks again 😊
Beautiful and amazing use of words dear friend. I liked the tone and the joy in the words. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Thank you, Coyote. Glad you like it (:
Coyote Poetry

4 Days Ago

You are welcome dear friend.
What a genteel but sensual huddle of honeyed words, Yumna! Methinks the moment might have come in discovering your natural genre. What it is, is for you to decide. :)

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YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Ah, thank you for the kind words, Em. I'm still not sure of that so I'm gonna keep trying till then .. read more
emmajoy

1 Week Ago

Hush... the wording is lovely, subtle yet.. inviting without being too much so. Beautiful, sweet pe.. read more
I know you are much too young to know Quadrophenia Rock Opera by The Who, but your lovely poem reminds me of one of the songs. Lyrical, sensual, ethereal- The first line is amazing"Rain on me "your azure eyes"- stunning. Good rhythm and flow and musicality. If you expanded this, it would be a great song...Love this!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

I'll be sure to check it out then :)
Thank you so much for appreciating, Annette. I'll try t.. read more
Beautifully gentle & gradual, sweet & sensual! Love the way you make it sound original, even tho these are feelings most people can relate to! *smile* (((HUGS)))

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YumnaKay

1 Week Ago

Thank you, BG! I really appreciate your words on my experimental pieces. They do boost me up to writ.. read more

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