A Confinement of Sorts

A Confinement of Sorts

A Chapter by Dr. YumnaKay
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Experimental ramblings. Release. Might be editing later still.

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I am twenty-four;
I live a life of expectations,
and not dreams, of responsibilities
and weights overburdening my
inexperienced shoulders.

I am twenty-four;
my smiles do not reach my eyes,
or so I have been told, neither do they
curve my lips, but stay frozen,
till my cheeks ache.

I am twenty-four;
as soon as I'm home, I exhale
a sigh of relief, often enclosed,
my mind, a sanctuary; a devastatingly
beautiful confinement of sorts.

I am twenty-four;
a woman born into being,
I live to please, I deceive
so many others, but no one
more than me ...



© 2018 Dr. YumnaKay



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What an honestly beautiful write this is Yumna! We first seek to deceive ourselves when we wear masks to please others, when we confine our worries to our subliminal selves. The pain of not being understood, the diffidence with which we reveal ourselves have to do with our deep seated (often correct) reservations about trusting our bare souls to others.

Beautifully expressed. A solid write.

Best,
M.

Posted 3 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

I love how you understand the depth of this write, Mallika. Thank you so much for your insight here .. read more



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Oh, how my heart breaks in response to reading this Yumna. I hope your future is so much brighter than it is now.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your wishes and for feeling this write, A.L. I appreciate it.
Each year layers us; there is expectation, uncertainty, confinement, a shrinking within our own skin, but the light of the human spirit inexorably shines through; and ultimately, twenty four is just an irrelevant number.

Beccy.

Posted 2 Months Ago


Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

You are right, in the end age is just irrelevant on the whole to the experiences we gain...
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Sometimes it becomes automatic. It is actually terrifying. You learn how to hide your emotions, only to show a smile.

Editing note. Third line you have a semicolon after dreams. Probably a typo.



Posted 2 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

It's terrifying indeed, especially after you come to realize it...
And yes, a stupid error o.. read more
Jon Roggie

2 Months Ago

Things slip through. Glad I could be of help.
Find the time to let the smile reach your ey.. read more
I love this piece, Dr. Yumna, plain and simple. This is no experimental omelette. :):)

It sings with the poignancy of a single-line piano melody, lonely for harmonies.

It moves from the public interaction to private reactions behind closed doors.

It pulls away from the physical self then delves into the internal circumstance or emotions and thoughts.

Beyond an elegant message and soft yet edgy word choices, this is a complex statement of philosophy.

Unreal, just how good this is!!!

V


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Your review here sumamrizes beautifully what I tried to convey in broken fragments. Thank you so muc.. read more
WOW! WOW! And WOW! I try not to assume each poem is about the poet writing it. But this is irresistible & I have to say, this profile reminds me of exactly the impressions I've gotten about you, from the little bit I've gotten to know you. And this really helps, to understand the enigma that is you. This is by far one of your best. I love the title, which is brilliantly incorporated into your message (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

Your use of the word 'enigma' for me makes me smile. I think, yes, this write is by far the most per.. read more
I stand stoned...etched in perfect...crumbling in my own mind. Its the hardest journey of life...not to be real...but to feel real.

Posted 2 Months Ago


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Dr. YumnaKay

2 Months Ago

I love your poetic review here. Thank you so much for your words, Queenie. x
Wo...I wonder how it would feel if there came a time where this did not have to be a truth and that exhale could be for good? And what would it take to make that possible? I am always carried along by your words and insights, but at the end I am always stifled by an underlying sense of sadness and frustration. I hope that here, you feel comfortable enough to dream, because as far as I am concerned there are no responsibilities that you are required to take care of. Just write and feel free, which I notice you do very well. Maybe its the start of something great. If this is not about you, I apologize, but it seemed so well expressed that it had to be. Loved it!!!

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Aye, this is indeed a personal write, as most of my serious posts are. .. I hope so too of that time.. read more
I just love experimental ramblings... but this is so much more than that.. there is a very special specialness here.... Neville

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words here, Neville. Glad you found it so. x
Neville Pettitt

3 Months Ago

my very sincere pleasure my friend x
my mind, a sanctuary; a devastatingly
beautiful confinement of sorts...

i guess when the outside world suffocates us ...its our mind that can help us find a place that is a safe heaven for us... its a sad situation ... :(

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

It's both a blessing and a curse...
Thank you for your words here and for reading, Ardra. App.. read more
Ardra

3 Months Ago

very true... .a blessing and a curse..cant agree more..
oh man! so descriptive and strong social commentary .. you show us her prison, her life so clearly with few details .. i see her .. she is the woman shackled .. kept back perhaps by upbringing, experiences, genetics or all three .. i would never go back to my "younger" days ... i have no longing for those insecure, impulsive, rebellious processes ;} well done ..this is what i like to call an important work .. so many people can "hear" it i am sure
E.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dr. YumnaKay

3 Months Ago

Well, I do long for these days to be over or idk, the mindset to change, hopefully.
Thank yo.. read more
Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

Doc! you have a great voice says i! it is always a satisfying thing to read your poetry ...as for th.. read more

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