Nation in Chaos

 

I find myself in a situation of Chaos

my mind mixed-up and cluttered

It's a reign of terror stuck with unruliness

so many riots and rebellions but no revolution

All there is is an uneasiness and unrest

so much disorder trapped with confusion

It's a free-for-all a holy mess

A trap that I find myself stuck

By the time the evil is done

there well be no triumph

no one will rejoice

the pride that had once been

will never be again

There will be no celebration

no victory that the world is no longer at war

There will be sadness

lost. All the symbolic statues

all the characteristics that the flags stood for

the significant of all the things we were

everything will be lost.

The flags stars and stripes well be turned

no one well look at the large green statue

no more comfort in what it used to stand for

freedom will never stand as it's message

There is no more amiable

no more friendliness in what once was a peaceful place

nothing well be easy nothing well be cozy

when your sleeping on the ground

praying for the simple things

home cooking, warmth

leave them all behind, because they well never come again

Here it is, the signal of death
The signs of Nazis, in sight of what was a great nation

the death or all, fire, prisons

torture, tell me please, this isn't my future

a place of gray

can no one else see are my eyes the only ones

I want them to notice

our nation is no longer great

Reviews

[EverEmma]

I am in love with this. Extremely powerful in all means. These are the things we should be worrying about, not if our hair looks fine. This is a major problem in our societies and should be addressed immediately. I feel so gravitated towards issues like this and will literally sit in bed at night and yell at the world. ( well, not out loud). I thank you for gracing us with the pleasure of your work.

[Martina]

This is complete awesome,
very well written. good job, i like it :)

[Tim]

Many people don't see the future of our country in the decline you speak of because they are ignorant to the state of our government. You spoke the idea behind this very well. Good job.

Pay attention to spelling. Will not well. Stripes not strips. Longer not long.

[Elizabeth]

"It's a reign of terror stuck with unruliness

so many riots and rebellions but no revolution" So wise... quite right.

[Jong Schrijver]

Beautiful and strong poem. Makes people think. Great piece.

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe the world can be saved still. It is amazing how 140 countries can organized a World cup for soccer. But can't sit down and talk peace. Maybe we need to recruit some of the men and woman of the leadership of the World cup and have peace talks. We can't give up. There must be men and woman of peace somewhere. A powerful poem the second time.
Coyote

[zendikar]

Great job very strong and well written especially for someone your age it's surprising that you realize as much as you do keep it up!

[xoxconsuelo]

A great poem. Very nicely written for a sixteen year old. The words are powerful as much as the whole poem and made me think for a while. Just one little recomendation, rythm or melody or rhyme would do a totaly different and more powerful piece. Anyways the poem was great and I liked it a lot!

[Undying Glory]

wonderfully written work, this is an epic poem. you've really described everything so damn well. such simple words have brought across such powerful messages.

There is no more amiable
no more friendliness in what once was a peaceful place
"nothing well be easy nothing well be cozy
when your sleeping on the ground
praying for the simple things
home cooking, warmth
leave them all behind, because they well never come again"
great words

[Augustus]

It is a very thought provoking write...An honest patriot is speaking through these lines...narrating the degeneration that her nation has fallen into...I think most people around the world can associate with a verse such as this...It also includes some commendable poetic elements (like the allusion to The Statue of Liberty for example)...The moral decline of a nation captured through simple words of a simple citizen...A very effective poem indeed!
My only word of advice would be to pay a little more attention to spelling and grammar, which is a little off in places...
But a very nice poem nonetheless :)

[KatiePie]

This was beautifully written. I also really enjoyed reading it. Its a real eye opener. Great write!
-Cathrine