Darkness Embraced

Darkness Embraced

A Chapter by Ashley.M.E

We walk the streets

Of hunger and pain

We feel no loss

For it’s all in vain

No one smiles

And no one cares

For a town where life is a hectic wreck

For everything is lost

And even more is torn

Where innocence is unknown

And love is a disaster

Where the wind never blows

And the water is liquor

Everyone is drunk

In the darkness of the land

Where eyes of a cat

Can only see sand

This is the place where we all will land

In the land

Where darkness is embraced

With a dark crimson hand.

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© 2010 Ashley.M.E


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I can see this as a song. Utterly amazing. Idk what else to say

Posted 11 Years Ago


The darker side of life so to speak, but let's hope the darkness never roams the land to this extent.
You treat the subject well and the odd rhymes are good though some feel forced to me.
Couple of things I want to bring up.
- There are some spelling mistakes: "loss" not lose - "innocence" not innocents
- The word "land" is used too many times too close together in the last few lines.
- And i did not understand the meaning behind,
"Where eyes of a cat
Can only see sand" - what does a cat seeing sand represent if you dont mind me asking.

All in all good effort :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


A very powerful poem. Remind me of a dark movie with no light or human kindness. It is a strong story and I like the feel you create in your words. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


I like it, I think it represents us very well. But I don't see it as a bad thing... I see it as human nature. But that's not important. Fantastic job honey, you did great
Rain

Posted 11 Years Ago


A sad statement bout our society indeed... we allow those down and out to be forgotten thinking that if we do then it don't exist... your poem is a true wake up call to the hearts of the world.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I think this is very well written. I love it.
100/100
Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


really good. i love this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Great job well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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haha... I forgot to read the title again, I guess that I have gotten too impressed with your work to read the title. Very rhythmical poem and I enjoy it a lot. You should become a poet...
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Posted 11 Years Ago


I enjoyed this, your deeper than most girls your age. Keep running with it!!

Posted 11 Years Ago



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