I'll Rise.

I'll Rise.

A Poem by A Risen Heroine.
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I’ll rise from my ashes

Look at the world with new eyes

This was the price I paid

The fire left an untouched space in my heart

Like it couldn’t burn me down,

Like I’ll still rise, even though I am a Fallen

Walls are closing in

Dead stars will show up.

I still feel you in me

I still feel you in my heart

but, now it's all over

We've had our fun

We're supposed to move on.

Your voice is like a harmony to me

It flows with mine as a perfect symphony.

Though it is hard leave behind, 

The one thing that made me feel alive.

So I slide from paranoid to paralyzed.

© 2011 A Risen Heroine.


Author's Note

A Risen Heroine.
Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always.

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Talented writing indeed!
I love how you describe this, the rebirth to the end.
The loss of someone precious being the only thing that you can depend on and now that they're gone, they are vulnerable to crash and wither away.
"It flows with mine as a perfect symphony.

Though it is hard leave behind,

The one thing that made me feel alive.

So I slide from paranoid to paralyzed."

That's probably the best part of the poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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entergetic write loving the last two lines

Posted 13 Years Ago


Beautiful and very well written. I honestly feel like you are a talented writer. Besides a misspelled word, I think you did a fantastic job here. Writing is a great way to voice your frustrations with life. We all have different journeys that we go on, and I am glad to have chosen to review this amazing writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow. It feels good to read a positive, hopeful, strengthening poem from you. We all faces situations in life that seem to get stuck on our frames of mind and body and its so difficult to move on to better happier things. Even though the past was so beautiful, we have to move on. Who knows, the future might be far better.

Great write! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


"Your voice is like a harmony to me
It flows with mine as a perfect symphony."
So amazing, pure beauty (:
I love this

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is amazing! Such a great write. I love the last line, I believe it perfectly ended the poem :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Amazing piece, love.
Your gonna turn out to be the risen heroine :)
Keep up the fantastic job.

~Namelezz~

Posted 13 Years Ago


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TJ
Rise. A beautiful piece. we will always rise up from the difficulties in life, and they'll just keep coming. although this piece has a tragic feel, theres a hope about it.


Posted 13 Years Ago


you hit some nice feeling.. flirting with an echo of desolation and a possible depressive demise..

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is great poetry. I like the feel of power growing with each line. Sometime we must feel the burn to understand life. I like the last line a lot.
"So I slide from paranoide to paralyzed"
Amazing ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago



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