Without You.

Without You.

A Poem by A Risen Heroine.
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Its been 38 days without him..

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“I can’t… I’m sorry..”

Its been 38 days without you

I’ve nearly reached the end.

 

I walk around in silence

My life is so hollow

I’m so devastated.

 

I feel your hands in mine every each time I walk down the street

Your arms around me in my sleep

And I see you everywhere I go.

 

Your presence still linger here

I can’t forget about you

You’re haunting my dreams.

 

Nightmares become daymares

I feel you no matter what I do

How come can I get through?

 

My life seem to be worthless

No, I’m not worth saving

I gave you my heart.

 

You are the only one I want to spend my life with

But you threw it in a car and walked away¨

Nothing seem to be real anymore.

 

So I walked into your room today

With a gun in my hand, I pointed it at my head

You screamed no and ran up to me

I shed a tear and blew my brain out.

© 2011 A Risen Heroine.


Author's Note

A Risen Heroine.
Ignore Grammar Problems.
Honest Opinion As Always.

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A powerful poem. Ain't worth dying for love of a man or a woman. Love become less important till we learn real love. Love for children and if lucky. Love for great dreams. A powerful poem. You can feel like death is peace. Death is just the ending. Closed the door to all things. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Strong and intense feelings.. but you know I wonder what they other voice would say.. What caused them to do what they did.. maybe they loved you as much as you did them but something in their world was stopping them.. idk.. I often wonder about suicide...what would happen if they waited just one more day...would the picture become clearer??? Obviously a great write since I'm rambling lol... xxx

Posted 12 Years Ago


epic..
im really sorry about it.. ik ive said it before buh.. im sorry :l

Posted 12 Years Ago


and when you did you wasted a young life that will love again and have their heart broken many more times. I remember my first heartbreak at 17, I thought my life was over but it had only begun.

Posted 12 Years Ago



Tragic ending to a difficult yet not implausible struggle. Sometimes the saying survival is the best revenge applies...though that's a slight modification of the original maxim...

Never give up...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Emotionally packed poem of dispair showing ones limits being taken to the max.

Your presence still linger here
I can’t forget about you
You’re haunting my dreams.


Love this stanza. I wrote a poem of the haunting of daydreams and nightmare. It's true and I felt it this poem. Wonderfully expressed.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This poem floored me! You weaved very emotional lines, and the end just...stopped. I enjoyed this piece because it is a situation which rings true for all of us because, we all fall in love and sometimes the tables turn. I loved your word choice, storytelling, count of "38 days" in the beginning stanza...everything! Wonderful job = ]

Posted 12 Years Ago


this is full of emotions and shows a heavy-heart. The funny thing is I wrote one named, Without You also

Posted 12 Years Ago


deep and cutting, very raw emotional drama

Posted 12 Years Ago



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