In the Desert

In the desert,

            The parched sand

Indicative of my throat

In the forest,

            Moisture pooled on my tongue-

            Akin to the leaves

The sea…

            The sea deceived me

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

Surely the endless movement of sea or ocean fascinates the more than average viewer. Can sit, stand or crouch and watch q great expanse of lqiuid near breathing - its mighty chest going hell for leather, keeping one wither alert or - depending on mood, relaxed, at peace.. mesmerized. Have slept overnight in the desert, have splept on quite a few beaches.. there is a vast difference.. yet the surroundings can make infinity closer. Your words conjur here, take one other than at the screen.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you so much Emma. Yes, there is so much more there. I enjoyed reading your expansive insight of the poem :)

[red93]

Like this a lot Brad - a nice informal colloquial quality and then it twists suddenly at the end.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you Red93

[W. Barrett Munn]

This is pretty elegant. It requires reading more than once to get the full impact, and that is a good thing.
W.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you so much. I whole heartedly agree. Thank you for taking the time

[K.P.H.M]

Amazing description! I especially love the last two lines.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you KPHM :)

[olla]

what did you expect from a gigantic puddle of water.. was it truly deception or a result of misplaced expectation..

[Brad Dehler]

Right, right. Perspective is a whole other player. Right you are. Thank you

[Robert Haigh]

A poem to ponder! For some reason it reminded me of that great song by America, "A Horse With No Name." Desert - forest - sea... all conjure up their own strong imagery and thoughts.

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you. Yes, these other places have straight forward offerings. The sea is deceptive in its inability to quench. A challenge of assumptions

[Lisasview]

Well, here I am again to read yet another short poem of yours and I did enjoy it.
Lisa, now in Spain reviewing words

[Brad Dehler]

Thank you! I am reviewing your work as well. Have a great day!

[Lisasview]

Yes, I see that and thank yo...
Lisa