BANANA FLOAT

pulled by the river, not crushed by the river

BANANA FLOAT

River current

totes me in

ripples of fantasy

my spirit, a banana float

allow echoes of water

to swish my core

jugs of sweet wine

Author's Note

River pulls me along, not crushes me

Reviews

[JE Falcon]

What a fun ride, thanks for sharing your seat. :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks for you short and sweet review!
Best, Betty

[JE Falcon]

I tend to be brief, to the point, and honest. With honesty being most important. This comes from years of writing manufacturing reports, sorry.

[Betty Hermelee]

I understand and appropriate!!

[Vertigo Cat1111]

The words in this poem are perfect for the title- every word blends beautifully just like all the ingredients in a Sundae and melts wonderfully. This poem feels full of ecstasy and happiness and relaxation and it really shows through its words. Pulled by the river is wonderful touch, too. Thank you so much for sharing. (:

[Betty Hermelee]

Hi, and thanks for your thoughtful review
Best, B

[Chris Shaw]

Banana floats, yummy. My mouth is watering Betty. Your little poem is a fantasy delight. Far better that the river carries you along on the flow than crushes you. Go with the flow is far easier than fighting the current. Sending you all the best from across the pond.

Chris

[Betty Hermelee]

Aw Chris, what a lovely review; best to you across the pond!!! B.

[Chris Shaw]

Thanking you dear poet :)

[Relic]

Like aged wine, rivers can taste as good to the soul.
To coast along as easy as taking a swig.

Interesting. :)

[Betty Hermelee]

Thank you for stopping by and reviewing my poem
Best, Betty

[albee]

“Swish my core “

It has a splashing sound, a primal sound
a fountain of ambrosial wine
from the core where the feelings adore

[Betty Hermelee]

What a great finish to my poem! Thank you from my heart dear Albee
Best, B.

[albee]

a quietly breathing brook
this poem, sings embodied love🙏

[Patricia]

Oh those floating ecstasy moments are the best! And well a jug of wine is just the cherry on that banana float! Wonderful little write!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks P., appreciate all your reviews
Best
B.

[Gee]

It is good to escape this life and all that it throws at us even if only for a brief moment. My escape is a beach in the Maldives that we visited just before Covid in early 2019.
Good morning Betty, hope you are well
Is banana float an alcoholic drinks ?

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Gee, what a nice review! Banana float is totally made up, let your mind go wild…
Best, B

[Gee]

I'm told the opposite at work :))

[zainul]

I love the picture you depicted of banana float and how it carried you in ripples of fantasy.Wonderful write.Congratulations!

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks so much for your review!
I'm looking for for some new writing from you!!
Best, B.

[Ken Simm.]

Afraid I don't drink but I do like the structure of this if I can not comment on the subject. And of course it is more than just about alcholol.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Ken, much more than just alcohol....its about the push and pull of life, and not having to care about it for an instant!
Best, B

[Dave Brown]

I'm never sure what most poems infer,(simple mind) but I do relate to that Banana float which I used to consume in gallons until heartburn put an end to it all

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks Dave, you need to stop eating those banana floats (whatever they are!!!)
Best, B