Unfolded

 

"Revisiting the Miasma Theory" compliments of Dirt

Unfolded

budding ........ 

scallion shapes that pulse 

above and throb below

pubescent tendrils worm in a cadence known

only to the uninitiated

a virgin soil

science with nature

male and female

our differences stew and brew

 scallions ... shaped above  

......... rooted below ....... 

watered on TV and in classrooms across our land

sculpting without skill and 

devolving into chaotic miasma 

my chosen designation is we.

E.

08/28/2022

 

Author's Note

Reviews

[Moonie]

I consider myself a centrist (I was center-left before the whole pronouns scene erupted, and now I am definitely more right-leaning). Every day, we witness a new demand from this crowd, and every day they go out of their way to erase women. The whole situation reminds me of the emperor's new clothes story with the naked emperor prancing about and most of the public pretending they don't see the obvious, lest they be shamed. It's a false civil rights movement where the "rights" that they demand are actually privileges that trample upon the rights of other groups (women and children). It is hilarious how they think science is on their side when it is just some greedy doctors (saying this as a doc myself) validating them for money or from fear of persecution.

[Einstein Noodle]

Yes! dear friend Moon ... you hit more than i wrote; but every point in your review is spot on .. in my opinion, of course ;) love love love on ya girl!

[Tate Morgan]

Lol I never cared how anybody referred to themselves. I just let kindness be my guide

[Einstein Noodle]

so ............ are you and i we then?? :)

[Einstein Noodle]

good to have your review old friend ... how's the bike running? still have it?

[Tate Morgan]

Yes I do and I bought a 1990 Ford F-150 with 23,000 miles on it. Works like a time machine when I get in it I think I’m 30 again

[Einstein Noodle]

you are brother! you are!! ;)))))) what a great find with so few miles on it. love those Fords eh!?

[Tom]

Yes, any carbon life can become rancid if there's no sanitary care, self or from secondhand, continued neglect will surely give rise to all kinds of moribund miasmas and who knows just what hideous beings may then rise and spring forth as articulated here in fine, poetic musings, kudus E.

' pubescent tendrils worm in a cadence known
only to the uninitiated

a virgin soil '

[Einstein Noodle]

damn Tom! your review puts my poem to shame ;) luv on ya brother .. you know ... i am getting old enough not to care much about my children's world ... haven't we done what we can???
E.

[Tom]

Yes indeed, btw.. Do you ever hear from Frieda these days?

[Einstein Noodle]

sadly I have not, Tom. She has truly dropped out it seems. :(

[Fran Marie]

We live in a moral decay society these days; a liberal attitude
where good is bad and vice versa and it stinks to high heaven,
a most fowl odor in today's world the unfolding and peeling
away of our value system, confusing and corrupting young
minds; being taught falsehoods and. incorrect and unnatural
ways in which to live..i like the way you wrote this E..telling it like it is

[Einstein Noodle]

dear Fran .. i am humbled and so very thankful for your review ... yes .. we are not in a "real" world anymore ... lies and corruptions of what is truth .. it is at the edge of terrifying .. when society is seemingly led by a light that is darkness .. i read it in the Bible .. Matthew 6:23 But if your eyes are bad, your whole body will be full of darkness. If then the light within you is darkness, how great is that darkness! ... Heavens help us eh!? so appreciate your thoughts on this poem .. thank you again Fran

[Chris Shaw]

So much food for thought in this write Mr E. I have to say it concerns me no end, the liberal rubbish now in our classrooms. All this business of pronouns and young children being greatly influenced by it. It's everywhere and the Internet ensures it stays in the forefront. Your short poem with its careful wording highlights so many issues now facing us that were unheard of years ago. I am feeling old and thinking that change doesn't necessarily mean that progress has been made. Quite the reverse in fact. Your poem opens up a whole can of worms for lively discussion. Let children be children I say. Sending you greetings and all good wishes from across the pond.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you so much for taking time .. your review makes tears in my heart .. yes ... such a plethora of issues that are consuming integrity, morals and ethics .. it is appalling and frightening at the same levels .. so glad for the confidence i have in my Faith ... luv and peace and health on ya Chris .. and thanks so much for your words.
E.

[Ken e Bujold]

an extremely well-thought, exquisitely rendered poem on youth and love. Loved every syllable of your work Temp. The opening image of the onion as a stand-in for youth is marvelous. As I traveled along through the poem my mind became hungrier and hungrier for the idea being writ large. The awakening of youth-full
awareness to reason and passion, sculpted as you say by media and tradition will in the end, if one is lucky, give way, rise to, a uniting of two.

Ken

[Einstein Noodle]

i really appreciate your take on this one Ken! you do me more than i deserve .. thank you for reading with insight and sensitivity
E.

[Robert Haigh]

A clever and thought-provoking write! We live in changing times - and not all for the good! Some old standards are needlessly cast aside, it would seem!

[Einstein Noodle]

I have to agree .. the world in some areas has most certainly thrown out the baby with the bath water .. traditions and standards that actually work for the good only make things even worse when cast aside .. thanks for taking time to read and leave your thoughts .. much appreciated Sir!
E.

[Soren]

Confusing to some, confusion in those that teach lead to confusion in those that listen. We are physiologically different, although some are confused about this as well. Psychologically we have our differences as well, although some would say no. On the other hand, our old sex roles have been reified and become rigid for no real reason. Individual differences in sexual orientation are natural and do not need to be taught. It is only how we react to those different than us that we need to be taught, but then this applies to much more than sexuality.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for such a thoughtful review Soren .. yes .. confusion breeds itself for sure .. on many planes and levels ... peace and joy my friend!
E.

[Temperance]

I haven't been on the cafe for a while, except to quickly post 2 poems so, missed this one. You could have something equating the Miasma Theory to what is going on with our youth and forced sexual preferences. All that hot air and poor teaching is spilling into the environment, especially in our schools, and causing infectious diseases of the mind! Someone needs to save our youth from the liberal and anti-sexual indoctrination. God made man and woman! No reason to morph our bodies into what they weren't meant to be. I have to agree with Winston though, it's us or them.....or "I". Given the theme of your poem, "we" makes it sound like you are both man and woman in one person. Is that what you meant? I suppose intellectually and emotionally that could be. Overall, Mr. E, I would give this poem a well done, good read, A+ and provocative. It does cause one to think and ponder. So glad to see you writing again. Thank you for sharing. Temp

[Einstein Noodle]

what a great review Temp! i hear you loud and clear .. i had not thought of your application of "we" ... it's meant in a broader sense but i suppose there may be male and female in every psyche ... i'll have to google it :)))))))))))))))))))) thanks so much for stopping by to read and especially for reviewing .. there is enigma in what i write typically .. what you see in this one give me hope for the world .. teaching lies as truth can only have devastating results .. hopefully our world will realize it more and more and get back to some of that old time Religion ;)
E.
ps. i will check out your new poems soon .. i remain in a creative slump and have spent minimal time on line including here at the Cafe' .. i hope to remedy that soon tho ... :)

[Temperance]

I too have been in a slump and, the last two I wrote were not my best. Just felt I needed to write something. T.

[Einstein Noodle]

i've been told the way to get better is to keep writing ... every day no matter ... i just can't bring myself to suffer in such a way ;)

[Temperance]

Yes, that would be suffering trying to get words down that aren’t in my mind yet.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ......................

[Red Brick Keshner]

The rigmarole is something not always graspable and yet we are wading in it everyday. My preferred designation would most probably be W in the 'we' but then again that may change as it is also allowed, or so I am lead to believe. Thanks for sharing. W.

[Einstein Noodle]

ever changing ... every moment eh, W ... thank you for taking time and letting me know you preferences ... wading in can sometimes be a little trepidatious eh!? ;)
E.

[S.zaynab.kamoonpury]

This poem is so amazing and abstract for me that had i not read the comments i would've been left without comprehending it the way you intended.
So now i guess it is about the gender lines being crossed resulting into hazy chaotic confusing gender fluid mess that kids in other countries can never understand and even your kids are being influenced to doubt their inborn natural genders and orientation due to such irrational teachings ahh. Kudos for this great rational poem!!

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you for your gracious review ... yes! such chaotic confusion indeed .. well said .. i think that could be the title of a poem big time! the gender of us all is biological and set with rare exception .. and those cases are surgically decided ... some times in vetro .. to save the life of the baby .. i appreciate your support .. right here at the Cafe'
E.