Winds of November

Winds of November

A Poem by Fran Marie
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Ae Feislighe Form

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Dancing Winds of November
disrobes the trees of Autumn
Leaf limb's,bare bough surrender
succumb to Nature's bottom

Crying Rains,sweep demanding
November's heavy downpours
Fall reigns,its fate, commanding
appearing dead,yet, endures

A Sleeping Moon regresses
undying in cold starkness
November's sky~depresses
rendering life to darkness

Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays

A Smiling Sun disappears
to a distant dark expanse
gray sky,sighs,and reappears
as November's winds still dance

© 2009 Fran Marie


Author's Note

  Fran Marie
Ae Freislighe

Each line of the Ae Freislighe has seven syllables, with lines
one and three ending in triple rhymes and two and four with
double rhymes. The poem must also end as it began, either with
the first syllable, word, phrase, or line.


The Ae Freislighe is a quatrain stanza with a fixed rhyme scheme

xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)
xxxx(xxa)
xxxxx(xb)

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well that's November no doubt ..i use to live in SD and sunny skies are rare in the summer, let alone in the fall..and those winds never stop blowing ..just change direction .. had to read several times to "get into" the rhythm of this rhyming ...i do not understand how the form fits ...with the double and triple rhyming??? so kept looking for that ..once i gave up and just read it i was able to enjoy the painting .. i think the alliterations are spaced nicely and balanced ..Irish poetry is filled with them eh!? Fall is one of my favorite seasons and here in the Ozarks the skies are not so bleak and the threats of winter not nearly so demanding ... the poem rather dark for glorious fall ...a creative and unique approach ... difficult form with syntax always a challenge ...almost precludes sticking to it ;) beautiful imagery as November disrobes the trees ..not sure what her "bottom" is .. i took it as bottoming out ..?
i think your first and last verses are the strong ones in this ..did you have to work and re-work many times? ;)
E.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks E. So much for reading..the triple rhyming are in lines one and three ending words in those .. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ahhhh syllables .. as if getting things down is not hard enough eh!? i was thinking rhyme ..where o .. read more
  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Lol
. Not a problem.. some forms are quite difficult to understsnd.. thanks agsin my friend... read more



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What a wordsnith you are! In spite of the technalities involved.. or maybe because of them, your November "inds are beautifully visual.

(Had to re.read this expert lesson)

Posted 1 Year Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks emmajoy.. always appreciate your reviews on my poetry
emmajoy

1 Year Ago

And the same in reverse. Have a happy weekend.
Great to see a master working her craft. Simply beautiful.

Excellent Read

Matthew

Posted 1 Year Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks Matthew.. so much appreciated
I loved how you used the language. So alive and beautiful dear Fran.
"Winking Stars spread, diffusing
growing dim,then fade away
denied star light, confusing
'Tis what November displays "
I liked the complete poem. The above lines stood out to me. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


  Fran Marie

1 Year Ago

Thanks John.. so vey much aapprciate your kind words
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

I love your work and you are welcome.
Great lyrical write, you conveyed the changing season perfectly. I feel it..

Posted 2 Years Ago


Cleverly constructed and a picturesque depiction of November's bleak disrobing. The Crying, Dancing, Sleeping etc were neatly fed into the scenes, though I must say 'Nature's bottom' was a show-stopper!
You handle words so well.

Posted 2 Years Ago


superb composition and fantastic imagery! well done! :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much dear friend,so appreciated..
Indra Neil

3 Years Ago

u r most welcome! :)
A work of art...signifies the immortality of nature. Beautiful.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Truly a beautiful poem about autumn, it captures the feeling that November's starkness evokes, when the sky cries rain and the wind strips the trees.
To me it conveys a feeling of forlornness, as November takes all signs of summer's life, that contrasts with the liveliness of the dancing wind.
The descriptions are stunning and overall it is an awesome poem.
I also like the rhyme scheme and the flow of it.
You did an amazing job here!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I agree with all the other comments: superb writing and I love this new form you've introduced here! I must try it. Thanks for sharing your wonderful skills with us!

Dee

Posted 8 Years Ago


What a complicated procedure, had to read it three times to understand .. stupid Brit!

Brilliant work, seems no matter what you do, you do it superbly. You've done the business re. the form, and created a series of masterpieces, stanza by stanza!

' A Smiling Sun disappears ~ to a distant dark expanse ~ gray sky,sighs,and reappears ~ as November's winds still dance ' - beautiful.





Posted 8 Years Ago



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