What Happens Next

July 16th !989.

 

I haven't written in a while, so I am going to have to update you as to what has happened since my last entry.

It's been four days since Tera invaded my territory, he's absolutely my least favorite person in the entire world.

I do not like him one bit, sure our feuding has settled down lately, but I do NOT like Tera.

 

We surf silently together, without any conversation, I refuse to let him win which is the reason why I continue to surf here, if he'd not leaving than neither am I. I turn away from him every time I change, but I know he's watching me, he always is. That stupid idiot probably likes me.

 

"Kat, why do you continue to give me these dirty looks? that isn't very friendly, you aren't being a great host."

"Firstly, don't call me that and second, I see you just admitted that this is my spot and you are merely visiting. You don't want to over stay your welcome, maybe it's time to move on."

Reviews

[exotic flotsam]

Having paddled my share of waves, this is accurate regardless. Surfers are enormously territorial. Kat can't help if he likes her. She has to blow him off by blowing him away with her rides. At least they have something in common. Go Big. I like the way this reads, glassy, smooth, leaving me wanting more.

[quixotic_rose]

haha :) cute

[Morrigan Nicole]

very realistic. i like Tera's use of "Kat" it makes him seem like he is invading more than just her turf. which he is.

[Amila Jay]

A great entry:)

[Alex Vidmar]

I like this. Very very good. :)

[khalid]

very nice and great. go ahead

[AK]

That was really nice:D great job!

[ThomasHinyard]

You have some grammatical errors, but for the most part I like it. This is a beginning of a diary entry as a part of your story, correct? I like the concept. I think it's smart to be writing a narrative through diary format, and more impressive that it's fictional. I think that you stopped at a good place too. You will be able to pick up when you feel the inspiration or when you feel your character continuing what she has to say. Don't rush it and don't push it. Let it happen when it happens. :)

[SlightlyOdd]

this is all really good just could you maybe describe it more maybe it's just me but have a little trouble seeing some of the chapters.

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To answer if you should continue, it ultimately depends on how you feel. I think It's over all, pretty solid. It depends on what you want to do with this. Is this something your really passionate about? Is this something you feel so strongly about that you want to publish it? Even if you write an entire book and never publish it can still be an excellent learning tool. You can treat it either way.

[fireblossom]

A very good piece of writing here. Moves the story along without bogging things down in detail. Well done.