Mistress of Sky

Mistress of Sky

A Poem by Neville

Mistress of Sky

 

She is like a baby bird

All eyes and feathered

Wisps of gold

 

Always hungry

And for the moment

My word vulnerable

 

Soon tho she will learn

To fly and then

Be gone like an eagle

 

Only to become

Mistress of sky and

Dance upon thermals

 

Like scented wood smoke

Rising cloudy and curious

A silver edged silhouette

 

Higher than mountains

Flawed but still glorious

A storm in a teacup chipped

 

 

© 2019 Neville


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Your way with words always leave me wanting more peeps into hidden meanings my friend..... she, the mistress of sky would be in my eyes a young growing female who however vulnerable will find her wings and make her glorious way upwards to freedom.............. or would it be the feathered kind you verse so well here Nev.......... ? - - which or whoever this was a very good read........... Fay

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Neville

1 Month Ago

Bless ya Fay... gonna leave it up to you to decide what's what... N :)



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Probably how my Dad thought of me. Great piece of work, Sir.

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Neville

1 Week Ago

thank you kindly...
Hi, Neville. I hope you are doing well there. I’m working my way through your book little by little. Good stuff, as I expected.

I love this poem. Just, as a mother, I sense the parent-child bond and that understanding that we only get them for so long but hope they will always return to grace us with their spirits and growth.

My favorite part is the end where you acknowledge the flawed nature of the ‘baby bird’. Mostly because it’s so easy to put a loved child (or loved anyone) on a pedestal and then feel disillusioned when their humanity shows through.

But our flaws are part of what makes us beautiful, indeed. Your ‘storm in a teacup chipped’ is such a lovely intimation of that. The mixing of power and delicacy alongside all that humanity.

Beautiful work.

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Neville

1 Week Ago

Thank you Eilis, not only for working through my book.. that alone means a great deal to me... Oh' a.. read more
Eilis

1 Week Ago

You’re welcome, Neville.
A lovely description of little ones leaving the nest .. animal or human love the sentiment beautifully portrayed.

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Neville

2 Weeks Ago


thank you again Katrina ... Neville
Beautiful use of our wonderful language.

Charlie is just turned thirteen and seems to have temporarily lost the ability of cohesive though and speech; but his grunting is so blissfully teen, that I am encouraged it will pass and he will one day ride those thermals. :))

Beccy.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


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Neville

4 Weeks Ago

Yes.. have no fear, it will pass... and I am sure he will ... bless you Beccy for checking in on me... read more
a lovely portrait of growth, be it animal or human. The words just flow. I love it. Betty hermelee

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Neville

4 Weeks Ago

thanking you most kindly my friend.. many thanks indeed.. Neville
Beautifully written dear friend. Each line has got a wonderful format. And I absolutely loved the lines- Flawed but still glorious. It in itself speaks a number of things but most importantly what it taught and reminded me was to accept people with their flaws and not to change them because it's the way we deal with our flaws, that define us. Great work 👍

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Neville

1 Month Ago

I am truly most grateful to you Anjeline... Bless you :)
Anjeline

3 Weeks Ago

It's my pleasure to read such wonderful pieces of literature :)
Neville, I could read this on multiple levels. Most literally, I could read loving someone, knowing they will leave and emptiness will fill the space. I also could read a vulnerable man who has original thoughts but has doubts about sharing, and once released (to fly) has fears of rejection, but must do as his nature calls. My thoughts are still evolving on this one, which perhaps remains out of my reach.

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Neville

1 Month Ago

you are most kind and much appreciated too my friend.. thank you..
WOWZA! GaGOWZA! This is top-notch & the best I've seen from you! I was marveling on two main streams . . . first, it's such an authentic imaginative way to portray how it can be with independent people that do not want to settle into the typical routines of relationship . . . and second, your popping use of language & imagery, so evocative of the complex feelings you suggest! This is awesome! (((STUNS))) Fondly, Margie

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Neville

1 Month Ago

Wowza gawowza's always do it for me Margie.. Luv's ya (TUNS) and fondly too .... Neville
Nev its not often I can see this so plainly but your write is evolving to something quite extraordinary lately. I'm not sure if this is a person of whom you refer or if this is about a poem you've sent into the air to take flight... doesn't matter cause if its an offspring or your words from your nurtures makings they both were reconstructed from your marks! the most beautiful teacups are the scarred ones in my book any day

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Neville

1 Month Ago

this guy here could not wish for a more encouraging and heartwarming visit.. cheers Robert
Such a delightful write. Letting those fledging go is both thrilled and terrifying. But few things are both so beautiful and powerful as seeing someone soar.

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Neville

1 Month Ago

How write you are and how grateful I am for the visit and consideration of these words.. many thanks.. read more

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