Softly ~ in my dreams... (loneliness)

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Softly ~ in my dreams...

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Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams.
Reaching to find I'm lonely; though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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My days, now empty without you,
to nights, no peace will come, it seems;
your touch I ache the long night through,
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Who'll grasp the beauty of my mind;
then, thrill my body to extremes,
or take my hand when I am blind?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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When scared, no one to hold me tight.
Oh, I shall know what life redeems ...
when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
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Richard W. Jenkins
©2015

1st Place Winner

FanStory International

Kyrielle Contest

                                 Kyrielle                               

The Kyrielle is a French form written in Quatrain verses.
Each Quatrain contains a repeated final line or phrase as a refrain.
There is no limit to the number of verses, but three is the required minimum.
Normal rhyme structure is a/a/b/B, c/c/b/B, d/d/b/B, etc; with B being the refrain line.
Alternate structure is a/b/a/B, c/b/c/B, d/b/d/B, etc; with B being the refrain or repeated line.
Mine is in iambic meter, composed of eight syllables (4 feet) per line, but line length is author's choice.

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Author's Note

Painting: "Lonely" in oils, by Sergei Chepik
If you would like to try this beautifully expressive form and need help, just let me know.
It can be used for any emotion, mood, or topic.

Constructive (well meant) comments and criticism are always welcome! : )

Reviews

[June bug]

Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.

WOW!! I love this part, this is a wonderful write. I like your image you used as well
very nicely written

[Richard🖌]

Hi, JB 🐞

With such an effulgent review as yours, why would I want another? And, that you love anything about my humble poetry, think it's wonderful, and nicely written certainly sets the page warmly aglow.

Thank you you ever-so gratefully for gifting a smile! ⁓ Richard🖌

[APOORVA]

Days turn to pain I cannot show,
nights into ever-endless streams.
Reaching to find I'm lonely; though,
I’ll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams.
WHAT AN AMAZING START. EXTREMELY TOUCHING, DEEP AND VIRILE.


Where's gone your shelter for my storm,
what of love spent ... in lifetime schemes,
when all turns cold, who'll keep me warm?
THIS IS OUT OF THE WORLD.
I CAN'T EXPRESS IN WORDS, REVIEW WON'T BE ENOUGH TO TELL YOU HOW BEAUTIFUL YOU HAVE WRITTEN

[Mr.Writer]

Wow... this is perfect! I love the perfect crisp of rhyming in your poem...

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Sir,
Your comments and praise are certainly warmly and gratefully appreciated! ⁓ Richard : )

[emmajoy]

Loneliness is frequently placed on a pedestal or on a cross.. either tribute or retribution for or of the past. Surely as you infer in your finely voiced poem, it's due to feeling unloved, to wanting another, to feeling unlovable in spite of..

Your knowledge has no bounds, Richard, you teach, inspire.. and feel.. the latter making the best teacher. Perhaps.

[Richard🖌]

If there is one thing you've proven is true, Em, it's knowing when I see your name as reviewer for one of my poems, there will be no doubt I will be left blessed with a smile, my mind with comfort, and a distinct awareness that I am no longer misunderstood, unappreciated, or alone.
Your praise comes wrapped in warming ease, familiarity, and often an underlying sense of gentle affection.
You make me feel recognized, understood, revered, and enjoyed.
You gently brim my heart and eyes; thank you ever-so sincerely, Em; it is always my pleasure to write for and share with you … smiles 'n hugs! ⁓ Richard : )

[emmajoy]

And would you believe it, friend and mentor.. I don't charge a cent! :)

[Richard🖌]

If you did, Em … for such wondrously treasured enthrallment, I would gladly pay it! ; )

[Great Aunt Astri]

Richard!!! I am shocked!

[emmajoy]

No need for that, i know a joke when i see it, Am more than willing to send someone to the naughty stair if needed! :)

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oh, you mean the 'sin bin'? I know all about that!

[Dave]

I am ever in awe of the beauty you convey in your poetry. Your loneliness spans a world of hurt and yet knowing that all that is left is to hold you softly in my dreams.

[Richard🖌]

Hi, Dave! : )
It's taken a time for me to come across your finely worded and appreciated review, my friend, but no that I have, it is with my most grateful thanks this response is given your most gracious enjoyment and praise … bless you your good heart and soul! ⁓ Richard

[Dave]

Richard - you make it so easy to respond positively to what you do. I wish I were only half as good as you.

[Richard🖌]

Dave,
I enjoyed and learned a lot from your writing, My Friend.

[Dave]

Thank you, Richard, you are very kind.
Take care - Dave

[Najam Us Saher]

Wow. I can feel your longingness beautifully written. Loved it.

[Richard🖌]

Thank you, Najam,
for your brief, yet, grasping, praising love of this rather poignant work … may you never know ceaseless loneliness.
Many blessings to you! ⁓ Richard : )

[Najam Us Saher]

Wow. You say thanks so beautifully 😊 your way of showing gratitude is so poetic. You're always welcome. It really touched my heart no one has ever said me thank you in such a pleasing manner. I thank you.

[Richard🖌]

Your words inspired my very own! ✨

[Najam Us Saher]

That's so good to hear. Thank you. ☺

[Maria]

I simply cannot utter a word.. it is brilliant..

[Richard🖌]

Gosh, Maria!
I can think of no more gratifying words in review from a wonderful poetess to a hopeful bard, than those of hers that express such awe of his humble efforts that she is struck speechless! ; )

Big hugs, Dear Lady-Poet✨ ⁓ Richard

[Maria]

Richard.. honestly, I would say more.. but I am so much pleased to read such a brilliant poem ( and hurt at the same time) that my first reaction was to say " I am speechless" I found my soul in your poem..

[Richard🖌]

Oh-MY, Maria!
You ever feel blessed to have been specially chosen for recognition or an honor, for your heart to swell from the sheer bliss of the moment … this is the way your expressed emotions and feelings make me feel.
Thank you, M'Lady … most humbly! ⁓ Richard 😌

[Warrior]

that was capturing on the deepest levels.

[Richard🖌]

My warmest gratitude to you, Dear Authoress, for reading and feeling in your depths, the essence of my humble poetic efforts! Hugs to you! ⁓ Richard : )

[Warrior]

my pleasure

[Cara]

when all else dims, you'll be my light.
I'll hold you Softly ~ in my dreams

Amazing, thank you for sharing

[Richard🖌]

Thank you for reading and for such a nice compliment.
The lines you've chosen epitomize the poem, I think.
You are most welcome, Cara! ⁓ Richard

[MOON]

Romantic poignant write nostalgic.

[Richard🖌]

Thanks for reading.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Richard,
Oh dreams, the reality of our night time forays. "Softly-in my dreams" was a very informative and beautiful portrayal of how the desires of our hearts can be realized. I would like to try this form. I would like to try it. Your author note is wonderful! Thank you for this inspiring trip into your sweet dreams...............Blessings to you. Kathy

[Richard🖌]

Aw, Kathy,
The warmth of enjoyment and appreciation in your words always touch my senses so sweetly.
I must apologize for waiting so long to respond, but the site is sometimes very naughty in failing to let me know of reviews, but I always relish and look forward to yours.
If you try this form, or already have, please, let me know so I can review it for you.

You always welcome to my sweet dreams, Kathy … warmest hugs! ⁓ Richard ; )