No More Heartbreak

Just.. Writing. About.. Stuff. So yeah, tell me what you think.

I have poured my heart out,

My secrets have all been told,

I thought I was special,

You acted like I was gold.

 

That's the problem though,

It was all just an act,

My tears started streaming,

Couldn't help but react.

 

Many times over,

My heart has been broken,

My heart has been stolen,

And kept as a token.

 

I thought I was in love,

But I was completely wrong,

I feel stupid now,

Should've seen it all along.

 

It took true love, though,

To help me realize my mistake,

No longer will I fall for it,

Hopefully no more heartbreak.

Reviews

[quinfinn]

such a sweet and wonderfully constructed write, this is an improvement over previous writes...so much more real emotion and not as much unconnected feeling. i think you need to keep writing and hone your skills, because there is a flame of talent burning within you which should not be denied. well done, Amandaaa!!!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you!

[Daniel]

As soon as I read: "You acted like I was gold." I knew the dude that caused your heartbreak was a huge @$$hole for making that go into past tense. Good read, I liked it. :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahaah, thank you Daniel (:

[Daniel]

welcome

[Sheila Kline]

You go Girl, and take the pain of this relationship and learn from it!! You can be happy....keep searching for that person who is just right for you! You deserve it!!
You have been able to convey the emotion of heartbreak in a way that touches the reader!!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you so much (:

[Baby Ricochet]

Love is hard

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Amen to that.

[Chris]

I enjoyed this grately thank you.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Haha, thank you (:

[Chris]

Your welcome miss your very welcome

[Akira Kodama]

This was filled with emotion, and I liked it a lot. Love will not always end in heartbreak, you just have to learn to be less naive and quick with it. Infatuation is very often perceived as "true everlasting love". I'm not saying that this is the case here, but it is very common. You learn after that stage has passed whether you are truly in love with someone. Sick people play with emotions. It saddens and angers me whenever I hear of that happening, and that is unfortunately very often. Anyways, a very good emotional write. Clearly from the heart.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks so much, that means a lot to me.

[MandaBear]

This was really well written! I also hope you dont ever have anymore heart beak!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thank you (:

[Be myself!]

I love it. Very true. I love how you tell it like it is. Good job.

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahah, thank you (:

[Be myself!]

Your welcome

[Angelic_Dreamer]

I enjoyed the rhyming pattern the most in this poem. Great Job with that. And I liked the way u expressed how this person was feeling it makes it....well awesome!!!Good Job with this:)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Hahah, thank you.

[Angelic_Dreamer]

ur welcome

[s y e]

Lovely. The emotion was so raw! This was really well written!

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

Thanks so much (:

[s y e]

Welcome1