The lump on the couch

sometimes you just can't get rid of it

Try as she might
she can't get the
lump out of the couch.

She moved it
she shook it
she even yelled
at it in sheer
frustration
but there it
remains.

turns out it
is not a lump
after all
but the man
she married
blocking a
perfectly good
view of the
tv.

Reviews

[Caradoc]

An interestingly playful piece. At first I thought the narrator would complain about the husband's refusal to help with chores around the house, but you surprised me with her merely wanting a better look at the television screen.

One question though. Is there a particular reason the first word of the final stanza is not capitalized? The two before it seem to be. And speaking of "it", the word appears to be needed in the fourth line of stanza two.

I also, and maybe it's just me, sense a slight edge to this piece. Perhaps the lump should take care it does not frustrate the woman too much. She might decide the only way to remove the lump from the couch is to give it forty whacks with her father's axe. ;)

Thanks for sharing.

-Caradoc

[Lyn Anderson]

I missed the it yes, and stylistically, I liked no capitals at the last - don't know why.

[Angi]

Ha! My lump snored all night long. Angi~

[TL Boehm]

Oh you're a peach. I totally feel like this at times. My lump is in the chair.

[Shane Hogan Poetry]

so simple yet so serious! Nice

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah this made me laugh my socks off! Lovely bit of fun poked at the couch potato!
It may be missing from 'at in sheer '. Another late night write lol