Bleeding Heart Girl Waters Roses~

Impersonating Selene.

My heart bleeds crimson rose petals

Watered by cerulean tears

As autumn leaves float and flutter

Teasing my air of despondency

They tangle with my ashen strands

Like lovers in a fit of passion

The willow sings sweet lullabies

Into my abalone shell ears

While his spindly fingers tug

At the sable laces of my corset

Trying to revive my motionless spirit

Cracking open the ark of my rib cage

He reaches inside to retrieve the pearl

Left behind by the sands of time

That were squeezed by love and longing

One day I gazed upon ivory towers

That stretched toward the heavens

And tickled the clouds' bellies

Just to hear them laugh

I dipped a toe in Poseidon's pool

Sending a ripple to the horizon

Then walked along the vast expanse

Of beaches overflowing with diamonds

That felt like crushed velvet

On the soles of my scaled feet

Awakened in obsidian darkness

I realize it was only a dream

As I lie in my sarcophagus

Swaddled in onyx angel wings

Watering the crimson roses

With my cerulean tears

Author's Note

My feeble attempt at mimicking Selene for the Impersonations contest. Be gentle. Or I'll put my sword through your eye socket. =P

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Having removed somewhat bloody sword, searching for blue roundness, I can just about make out words extreme and passionate .. a copy maybe but a fine one, juggling language in your own style with a touch of something or someone else!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Excellent impersonation, splendid poem!

[Audrey Howitt]

Love this poem. Nice job!

[Veronica Chandler]

I enjoyed this read emensely! You captured my attention and kept it to the very last word. I loved the lines, "One day I gazed upon ivory towers
That stretched toward the heavens
And tickled the clouds' bellies
Just to hear them laugh
Incredibly beautiful!

[Crowley]

Those are somne gynormous shoes to fill, but lady...let me tell you, this was a fabulous write and I think Selens should be flattered and proud. Nice gob, especially with her signature use of color.

[Muse]

Love the imagery, nicely done!

[Amy Bumpas]

This is beautiful....like a dream flowing from one line to
another. The visuals here are vivid, lush, wanting to be
touched, stroked, for our minds to wonder.....

[Poetic Beauty]

You did an amazing attempt and the imagery is grand with the metaphors that you have woven into this piece. The the visions are clear and I was able to picture them in my mind as I was reading them.

[Norma M Sutton]

lol hmmm Can't have that . . . I NEED my eyes :). I like it. the use of color and metaphors are great.

[Wondering Mind]

wonderful! I especially like the 4th and 6th stanzas..I think it was the toe in the 6th