Chapter One: Rapture

In the upcoming days.

Chapter One: Rapture

May 21th 2011. The Day of Judgment according to a lot of religious people and catchy public billboards. They say on that day, Jesus Christ himself will return and rapture all the non-sinners up to heaven. All the rest will remain on a rotting earth when they will spend forever in their own living hell. At least that’s what I have been taught. I have been a good Christian boy all my life. Eighteen years of no sins. I have refrained from sex, drugs and even rock n roll. I have gone to Church regularly, actually never missed a Sunday or any special sermon. Mainly because of my strict religious parents. I have done daily and nightly prays. I have done everything I needed to be raptured. But just over the last three days before the almighty judgment day, I may have slipped up a little. I and my longtime friend, more like non official girlfriend, Hannah, sinned. I was so clean and good spirited before this, but now I’m ruined for the big day. We sinned with the purest intentions but it still was against our religion. And it turned out this one judgment day that would end up happening.

Reviews

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

It's funny to read this on September 14, 2011. :) Your main character has a nice voice, but this doesn't feel like a chapter--more like an overlong paragraph dealing with a few different subjects that should have their own paragraphs. Also, as a Christian--or a currently religiously-confused person who was raised as a Christian--this main character doesn't seem like a true believer, but someone who goes through the motions. Praying and trying not to sin ("eighteen years of no sins" is impossible) doesn't make a Christian. I guess there are strict people like this out there, but this character doesn't even sound like he believes in God, so it's weird to call him a Christian....unless that's the point that you're trying to make...

[Ashley]

Intense thus far

[TheMizFit]

Very good intro! I'm not curious as to what would happen. I've never really read anything quite like this so it's really interesting :)

By the way, I don't think listening to rock n roll is a sin, just putting it out there. Haha.

[torments_scribe]

Excellent intro...pulled me right in.

[Imagination-mage]

this is really good, gives u a good view on those religious and how strict it can be

[TJ]

came back to read this chapter before i went on to chapter 3
good set-up

[Krystal Nicole]

I ove it! Great job! However I do not believe Christ is coming back May 21- Wait that' today!!! Lol. Anyways, I like the topic and the story so far seems interesting. Cant wait to read more.

[Megan]

I think the topic is interesting. Two teenage kids who have gone against their religion, sinned, and judgment day is upcoming. I think that the scenario paves the way for a great, exciting story upcoming. it will be interesting to see where this story goes. One thing I'm not sure of. In a way, the words "ruined it for the big day" sound to me like, "oh, I just blew it". Is that the way it's supposed to sound?

[Bailey C. Writing]

I don't believe in May 21st at all. And I'm Christian, sort of almost kind of bordering on Agnostic I guess...
Don't be too worried, even if you are religious. Even a lot of my uber religious friends think this is crap.

[CharlesMonroe]

I'm not sure if this has any personal meaning...but it really scares me cause I've sinned in soooo many ways. I really don't want to, but I can't wait to read more (: