love's rematch

love's rematch

 

 

salty composure

Hedonistic compunction

love thrown over a shoulder

but the luck is just dry tears

the umbrella punctured with stinging emotion

 

a heart flailing at clouds

with ineffective fists

clenched dreams lose the fight

once broken, there is no second-ten count

the fight is called before it starts.

 

 

erin-cilberto

4/5/17

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

An the winner is ...:)...............

[Sami Khalil]

"there is no second-ten count

the fight is called before it starts."

[Sami Khalil]

Reminds me of a boxing rematch, the uphill battle between and the judges verdict for the heavy weight champion of the world. A knock out punch and a knock out poem you deliver for us...:).........................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Sami....you are a kind soul.

j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly. ....::::)))))

[Paper]

I don't understand this. Not that that's any fault of yours. I'm just so very new to this sort of thing, that the layers of imagery are very dense and hard for me to get through. I need to keep reading more poetry.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and just read into it what you see, Paper...don't try to figure out what the poet was thinking when he or she wrote the poem...just think about how it speaks to you...there is no right or wrong when it comes to poetry.
thanks for reading.
j.

[emmajoy]

Words to delve into, jacob.. not easy but a fine example of 'how to.. ..

Guess, assume, that trying a second time round rarely comes to anything. one tries but too often the mauling begins.. and the hurt just hurts that much more. Perhaps?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, emma.
j.

[emmajoy]

I can but try ..

[The Iron Horseman]

I enjoyed this.
I think you meant 'ten-second' in the 4th line of the second verse, though!.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, actually i did mean second-ten count...referring to the rematch--another ten count.

thanks for your words,
j.

[The Iron Horseman]

Got it! How about 'second-ten-second count'? :)