on the subject of poetry

 

on the subject of poetry

 

 

sea

sky

sand clouds

poem

 

see

sky

sans clouds

poem

 

writer's hourglass

sky's the limit

ideas hit the throttle

invade space

warp speed thoughts

of sea

sky

clouds optional

tears not

love not

pain not

 

carriage ride

the typist's overt ego

intercedes

sans sense

sans feeling

sans free verse swinging

 

see?

poetry

clouds hover

tears

pain

love

wait in shelter

until it all passes

 

then look up

to see words

like fallout

drop from the sky

as cynics

look up

and deny.

 

 

7/31/22

Reviews

[Stella Armour]

Oh heck, i have read this 3 times now Jacob, and you know how i struggle sometimes lol

I can only say that a friend once told me to write poems to make our friends smile because there is enough angst in the world without adding to it.
So mainly that is what i do ...... if poems start getting maudlin then i just tear them up, in the bin they go ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and you do write happy very well, Stella...
I guess I don't...but I do try to slip some humor in no matter what.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

I think what you're getting at here is poetry has become too much "fufu" meaning clouds, sky, sea, cosmos,
flowers, balloons, etc....why can't we talk of relationships (bad or good) , or suffering, or pain, or death, or struggle....we should be putting more feeling into our poetry....more human feeling...and let our minds go more stream of conscienceless... less of the "the sea meets the sky and blend together" kind of mindset.
Am I correct?
Best, B

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I don't know about correct...I don't see write or wrong in poetry...but mainly preference..
thank you for your review.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Thanks J.
And you're welcome!

[Weeping willow]

Wonderful write, I see words of poetry as life fulfilling to a better times. A world where there is peace and no hate. Love your words, see what they brought out of me ;-}

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I wish poetry could change the world we are living in now, and I really appreciate your words, willow.
thank you much, just that anyone would like anything I write means the world.
j.