Moon Struck

For the Crimson diavolo, you know who you are...let it be me.

Celestial skies were brilliantly bursting that night

       my eyes were open wide

             when I tripped into you

swiftly fell to the rhythm of your heat

          sweet was the fluid dance

                   of merging hearts

like moonbeams that pranced on twilight lit seas

         i believed in you  as the promised religion

    got lost in the nirvana of your touch

         i surrendered my soul in lush tones of oleander

luscious poison, so enthralling, it hurt so good

            this caged freedom of flight clipped

                                  my wayward gypsy wings

i wantonly entrusted them to your care

 you inspired me to captivate the moon

                              in reckless abandon

i wished upon an imploding stellar star 

          that this crash commune in divine reality

Author's Note

Reviews

[Avocations of Amber]

This is absolutely stunning, Frieda. I love the words you chose for this piece.....the images of white oleander, the gypsy wings, the stellar star......mesmerizing. This is perhaps my favorite yet. Such a vivid imagination you portray in your writings. I'm enthralled.

[Frieda P]

I'm enthralled by your review Amber, thanks so much, really appreciate it, love the oleander myself. :-)

[Avocations of Amber]

Just hurry up and write some more! haha.... :) can't wait to read them.....

[Jack...]

And may the moon always rise and bring its sweet light to you Dear Frieda. I believe the only thing more beautiful than the moon would be to see it reflected in your eyes. This was wonderul, this gave me goosebumps. You have such a way about your phrasing so that it reaches from this screen and touches the reader. Very nice.

[Frieda P]

Wow Jack, I do believe you made me blush.

[Dream Weaver]

Be still my heart! absolutely stellar!

[Frieda P]

Woo, I can dance to this one! :-)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I feel the love, a romantic yearning... a sweet whisper of wishes into the night...
How beautiful is this, to feel this emotion... truly magical!

A Stellar write, Friedalicious! ~xo~:)

[Frieda P]

Love the word 'stellar' woot, love your review, hell I love you! Thanks ;-) xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is either a really good thing or a really bad thing...

finally a love i can live with...one that just knocks me to my knees to pray to god in thanks...or "i got fooled again"

sucked up by the allure, the want...and then spat out, like always...

i see this one going either way, but either way...the wording is simply "frieda"

you have such a unique voice...you are like one of the 60's rock groups...you can hear the music and catch a few lyrics and immediately recognize the artist.

it is such with your poetry...

[Frieda P]

Wow jacob, I love this review with my whole entire heart, that has to be the best compliment you could ever give a poet...thanks so much!

[Barbara Walker]

This feels so other worldly, the way some relationships cannot be described in earthly words. I can feel the emotions deeply, along with a bit of wistfulness. Love the line-"Like moonbeams that pranced on twilight lit seas." Great imagery there!

[Frieda P]

Thanks Barbara, thrilled you enjoyed it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

like moonbeams that pranced on twilight lit seas
i believed in you as the promised religion
got lost in the nirvana of your touch

WOWZA that is unbridled passion told like never before.

[Frieda P]

Ooo something about when you say 'unbridled passion' that sends shivers up my spine, thanks Dale!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

I kinda like that :)

[Veronica Chandler]

This piece moves my spirit, and tickles the memory of such familiar tastes of,
" surrendered my soul in lush tones of oleander
luscious poison, so enthralling, it hurt so good..." The song...kicked my a*s for extra measure, as I read and felt the familiar feelings of "Gypsy wings clipped" Your vibe rocked my world tonight sweet, savory with a slight tang. Just what the doctor ordered!

[Frieda P]

Ha hope that didn't hurt too much, thanks Veronica, much appreciated!

[quinfinn]

seems there is a part of you which struggles to be seen in spite of your hardened veneer. or perhaps this is another of your many beautiful memories which you have decided to share or to reminisce about. either way, there is a sadness and a shadow of whimsy hovering over this piece...maybe it is just me, you know how sensitive i can be. this was a beautiful song you chose to accompany this gorgeous write, frieda. well done.

[Frieda P]

Hardened veneer, moi? That's just a little chocolate hard shell, thanks quin!

[quinfinn]

looked up diavolo...not a word.....according to O.E.D. so i will assume that there is a red deisel volvo running around town....

[Frieda P]

Think we've been here before quin, think Spaghetti Fra Diavolo...

[quinfinn]

forget it...i give up

[Frieda P]

It's devil in Italiano...you're no fun anymore. ;-P

[quinfinn]

spaghetti devil...yeh, makes perfect sense to me. maybe i just got old.

[Frieda P]

As far as food goes, it means hotter than hell!

[redflutterby]

...red diesel Volvo... bahaha.... that's funny!! She's right diavalo means devil in Italian.. and crimson would make it the red devil.That horned devil is always making us women swoon... sigh....;-)

[Frieda P]

O.O they let you out of the closet again! ;-P

[quinfinn]

well, this isn't Cleveland but you can still call me clueless.... i guess the individual it was intended for will understand.... i got left out of that loop.

[redflutterby]

Yes occasionally they let me out to play!!! ;-pppp
I'm good friends with diavolo... the horned one knows everything. Hahaha... back to work in the closet now. I only get 15 minute breaks you know. Ughhhh....

[Renée]

Like a romantic dance .. lovely

[Frieda P]

Thanks for the lovely review Renee :-)

[Renée]

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[Harrisen Viator]

I love this poem. The imagery is amazing, but this:

"like moonbeams that pranced on twilight lit seas
i believed in you as the promised religion
got lost in the nirvana of your touch"

just wow, I have no words to describe those three lines. I am simply awestruck with this one.
Amazing.
-Harrisen

[Frieda P]

Wow, what a sweet review Harrisen, thanks!