A Winter Poem

A Winter Poem

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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Cinquain: poem of 5 lines with syllabic counts of 2, 4, 6, 8 and 2 respectively.... the captcha for this one is "plainish" :))))))))) gotta love it right?!

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My snow
December's moon
Beleaguering too soon
the hearth that holds a fiery heat
now cold
E.
11/12/2018

© 2018 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
this is a poem i submitted for an on-line poetry class ... (for beginners) ;) and this is the first Cinquaine i have written

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Great piece, never mind Cinquaine, how about Cinqestrellas

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

ahahaha Cinqestrellas ..... wasn't she the maid that went to a ball ???? ;) glad you found this one .. read more
I'm not too good at this
but I love to read new
forms of poems with you.

Cheers 😊 my friend

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

same here Benita! but i like to be challenged by form and tradition ... it helps broaden and deepen .. read more
What a fine effort, Gene!
Spot-on syllable-counts, great imagery, flow, and the theme is held throughout … good stuff! : )
Though, rhyme is not required for this form, your two line rhyme lends an interesting touch.
"My" snow infers a personal theme, which allows the reader leeway in interpreting this piece as metaphorically about human inference, or about Nature, with the snow being yours in your yard/land, etc.

I like this very much, and for your first Cinquain it's excellent, indeed … thanks for the deeelightful treat, buddy! ⁓ Richard 🍃
A+

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thanks Richard :) the way you point things out really helps ... yes ... human and/or Nature ;))))))).. read more
Final attempt. For now!

The Meaning of Life

Deep breaths
as we hold on,
embrace the will to live,
dance with joy at simply being
alive!

29/01/19


Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

i think i like this one the most my friend .. the breath, the dance, the embrace of "being" .. wonde.. read more
John Alexander McFadyen

7 Months Ago

Thanks 'E' I do like to try new forms so thank you for the inspiration. Will post them properly.
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

:) ..................
Second attempt. Might get it sometime!

Embrace

Feel me
and hold me close,
enough to feel you breathe,
to know what lays with a heart
of gold.

29/01/19


Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

L4 needs a syllable ..prhaps you meant to write "within" instead of "with" ???? the story of love's .. read more
John Alexander McFadyen

7 Months Ago

Yes thanks 'E', I had seen it and amended it and you were spot on!
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

;) ..................
Not sure I have nailed it?

Dream

If I
could only feel
your sweet kiss on my lips,
then I would be a happy man,
always.

29/01/19


Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

by george i think yee've gottit! this is a "Dream" i am well aware of from me youth ... so many love.. read more
John Alexander McFadyen

7 Months Ago

Indeed and now we take what we can from memories lol! Many thanks.
Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

yes...the memories ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
Another novel technique and a pertinent topic indeed as we endure winter's tongue. Think I may try this one! Looks fun!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

spot on John!!! ;) I see you posted it above ... love on ya sir!
E.
However did I miss this? There you go again, sweeping me off my feet. I love it, Gene!

Posted 7 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

7 Months Ago

awwwww and such lovely feet they are dear Legs ;))))))) you made my day with your favorable review d.. read more
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I am always in awe that five lines can speak a whole story of a world. Here it is in cold contrasts with a memory of warmth and light. What a beautiful vision!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

thanks Owly! i appreciate your encouraging words .. the form was, for sure, a challenge for me ... h.. read more
An essay it is in brevity, so much said in so few lines. You have to love those shorties!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

8 Months Ago

thanks Andrew ... i take my lessons on that from you for sure ;) thanks for reviewing sir ... glad y.. read more

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