"The Line" in collaboration with Sleepless Volcano and editing by Richard

"The Line" in collaboration with Sleepless Volcano and editing by Richard

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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an English Sonnet

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The Line


Drawn there in rows, they wait on news to come;

the kids play hide-and-seek, while parents paced.

Is no one there to beat their silent drum?   

So thick the dread, all hope is soon erased.


A shout collides on empty space today,

with steel resolve for havens not their own.

A mother gives her babe to thieves in pay,

foul reaping fruits fermenting sin thus sown.


Now, strangers' hands are raised in muted cries,

demanding place to have in have nots' angst.

The child reveals his wide, bewildered eyes,

a light that hopes to shine upon their ranks.


Although the lines are muddied down through time;

alone, a child will pay for all this crime.

© 2019 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

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To be honest, my main complaint about sonnets is that they are usually too fluffy in content. It's like poets are concentrating on nailing the form, but the message is often lukewarm romantic tripe that sounds like every other sonnet. Well, let me tell ya, this sonnet does NOT suffer that malady! You have something to say & you say it with such powerful intensity, the reader is completely forgetting to look at whatever traces of "sonnet" might be there to inspect & admire! This is a great poem & I congratulate you all on your poetic efforts & for having such heart (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

oh my goodness dear barley!! how you have made this effort more than worth it .. i agree completely .. read more



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We are all the b*****d sons of our fathers sins, a dark, twisting poem to be proud of, thanks E,

Posted 1 Week Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

thanks for taking time gram! most appreciated .. definitely dark lines in this whole situation .. wo.. read more
gram linski

1 Week Ago

and as for Hendrix, genius, the only guitarist that didn't like Hendrix was Noel Redding, lol, imagi.. read more
Einstein Noodle

6 Days Ago

yes...pure genius for sure ... my Norma doesn't like Hendrix either .. i will never understand that .. read more
I have reviewed this now four times and each time the bloody gremlins ate it. So Extraordinary, empathic, revolutionary, strong, incredible piece of writing. now to try again.

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Einstein Noodle

1 Week Ago

God bless you for your persistence Ken!!! I am blessed always with your visits ... glad this spoke t.. read more
A classical form with a current message that cuts to the bone...Congrats on this excellent, powerful and important collaboration of thoughts and words, music and photo, by all three poets! Together you call out an atrocity that spans centuries, in different forms/different places, and continues this very minute. Children as barter, as innocent pawns, paying the ultimate price for a myriad of sins not their own. Why? How? “A child will pay for all this crime”, while blind eyes turn away. Your deeply moving words give them a voice. Kudos!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thank you so much Annette .. for your positive review ... its very encouraging when someone reads an.. read more
dear Gene and Sleepless... It is truly unbelievable that "countries" cannot protect the innocence of
children... even our country because of politics... We are in total shock and the Children suffer...
So heart-wrenching. Your Sonnet done in collaboration, says so much in desperate breaths of
societies suicidal sufferings. I do believe that Poetry could change the evil that has infiltrated many countries... even our own. This would be our prayer to bring the Truth to the forefront. With out Love and Mercy... how can we survive. truly, Pat

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Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

yes!! wouldn't it be something if all politicians were required to read poetry after morning prayers.. read more
A sonnet worth reading twice and absorbing! A powerful message to the benefit of all who will brave a sonnet. ;)

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thanks R E! well worth to try says i .. no matter what one's inclination is toward in form .. the di.. read more
Is this a new poetic line for you? I think this sonnet is very effective,and seems to be perfect in format. Your last two 'resolution' lines conclude the poem beautifully as well as opening it up for future thought. I like it.

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Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

well ... I have tried sonnets and other classic forms from time to time because I believe I need tha.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

1 Month Ago

Aw thank you, Einstein
And that line is indeed a thin one as we sit in our safe havens thinking we are immune. Such a sad snapshop of part of our sad world as people flee towards us seeking a better life. A precise sonnet and one that says more than I love you, I love you, I love you!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

God bless John! your sensitivity touches me ol' heart sir! thank you so much for all the support you.. read more
A powerfully emotional write. The collaboration is so good it is impossible to tell who wrote which lines...seamless. Yes, the children suffer and no matter which side of the political fence one is on, that is sad. Lydi**

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

yes it is :( thank you for reviewing .. i am super happy that the non-political is evident .. and a .. read more
Lydia

1 Month Ago

So many years...and good ones they have been, E. May we read each other for many more.
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

yes indeed Lydia! many many!! love on ya girl! :)
nicely nicely done such a these times reference in a past times tone makes for a very interesting read with an extra AHA! punch at the end! Cant say I was ready for this one hit me completely by surprise! what a gem of a write guys A big Bunny fedora wave to you folks! This has everything I love most in it rhyme and rhythm and awesome content with an excellent exclamation point ending.

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Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

wow! the big Bunny fedora wave!!!!! what greater honor i can not imagine sir :) thanks s o much for .. read more
This really puts political agendas in perspective... no matter the stance we take on an issue like this, we can't deny its usually the children who pay the heaviest price! Bravo on the collective effort!

Posted 1 Month Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

thanks Travis .. appreciate your reviewing .. i think you are absolutely right about the downfall of.. read more

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