With Out You

These words babe !

i write for you,

you know who you are,

you hung the moon,you created the stars

 

You captivated my heart,

your the only one i see,

it`s you babe,

your the only one for me.

 

You see,

true love paralyzes the mind,

there could never be another,

my heart is blind.

 

No matter where i look,

it`s you that i see,

can`t you see inside my soul,

can`t you see inside of me.

 

My heart,is like a volcano erupting inside,

without you babe im just a drop in the sand,

i love you always,

i will always`s be your man ...

Reviews

[DIVYA]

No matter where i look,
it`s you that i see,
can`t you see inside my soul,
can`t you see inside of me.

A perfect lover's song...complete with lovely imagery and rhyme! Loved it to bits!

[wordman]

thank you very much !

[DIVYA]

Its such a pleasure!

[Mirror]

Ah! I can dance this words with beats in my head.
No matter where i look,

it`s you that i see,

can`t you see inside my soul,

can`t you see inside of me.

This was my refrain: "y heart,is like a volcano erupting inside,

without you babe im just a drop in the sand,

i love you always,

i will always`s be your man ..."

Then i repeated this verse
No matter where i look,

it`s you that i see,

can`t you see inside my soul,

can`t you see inside of me.

Oh, man. How i wish this was an album hit.

[wordman]

you are sweet,thank you just another silly love song,poem

[Mirror]

Hahaha!!! C'mon. If not fear of Plagiarism, i would have sang this and send it on you tube. It is beautiful.

[wordman]

go for it,send me a link to listen to it

[Mirror]

okay!!!! I will soon....

[Relic]

This is a nice touching poem Wordman. I'm sure the woman who this was directed at would love it.

[wordman]

thank you very much mr relic,wrote this poem 14 years ago

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Very nice clear form. Words are very precise in unity. Message of love is very clear and beautiful.

[wordman]

so, i guess you liked it ! lol,,thanks

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Yes I like it lot. Keep writing my friend.

[Priyanshi]

So beautiful poem....it's so touching my heart, and a romantic write..I really loved it.

[wordman]

thank you for the visit !

[Priyanshi]

My pleasure

[Theresa]

That's beautiful glad I had the chance to read

[wordman]

thank you,glad you did

[John Alexander McFadyen]

An intensely romantic and deeply emotional write here Ron. You show a sensitivity and a deeply caring side to you in this lovely piece.

[wordman]

thank you john

[Angie G]

Wow.. Just beautiful!! Someone is deep in love!!! Happy writing my sweet friend!!

[wordman]

thank you for the visit angie.

[pia]

beautifully worded !!! this really touched the heart

[wordman]

thank you pia.