Unreached destination...

Get deep into the words...

In that windy evening 

Down the path of dewy grass 

You walked along with me. 

My hand in yours, yours in mine 

Walking together to nowhere 

When your curious eyes stared me 

And my unanswerable lips 

Bent down, counting the footsteps 

A drop of tear fell from my eye 

Forming a transparent droplet

Right on the grass 

As you stopped there and told 

"I have waited enough to listen you" 

And I replied 

"These are the last steps we're taking together..."

 .........................

Author's Note

something left unsaid...

Reviews

[Vertigo Cat1111]

There's a deep, painful sadness here, that's very palpable, and it only makes it better by your wonderful writing. The line about the teardrop and the very last line was so hurtful, it really punches you in the gut. Great poem!

[Ashish]

"Forming a transparent droplet
Right on the grass"
Great imagination dear.

Of course about the ending I want to say that....................

[Anindita Janhabee]

that................?

[Anushree]

Great setting and very well written. The depth of emotion is sure well felt by all the readers

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thanks for stopping by...

[LightningLegacy7]

Wonderful! Very deep, albeit saddening...but that's what makes it so interesting. It's wonderful, I hope to read more from you in the future. Definitely a finalist in my contest next week!

[Anindita Janhabee]

oh.. thank you so very much my dear!!!
I am glad you liked my piece...
yeah, sure take your time reading... and enjoy reading...
hv a gd day!!

[Adam Adams]

that's weird. this type of feeling is really very weird esp. when the time comes to say goodbye to things around. short. simple. and very deeply written.

[Anindita Janhabee]

well, weird things are not done by all... making it unique... maybe...
thanks though....

[Adam Adams]

love's bizzare so it's possible to be hung in 'twixt its analogies so dramatically.

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

The title, the end, the feelings, the sadness your poetry has lots of emotions with an emotional theme. Nice poem.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thank you!!! Well, I'd take it further but I lost my focus and words on the way and that's the reason I had to post it as it was...

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Your most welcome :)

[Lydia Shutter]

When both parties realize a relationship is over, it is a sad moment....and yet, it is a sign life will go on. Beautifully poignant write. Lydi**

[Anindita Janhabee]

thank you ma'am for the time reading....
yes, when one realizes something, it has to be shared and ended in a perfect way as it had started...

[Ana Papaya]

A sadness here as the realisation comes forth that the relationship had ended.
The words themselves are difficult to speak, but it's best to speak them rather than to keep walking, as you have described so perfectly here. This poem really tugs at the heart.

[Anindita Janhabee]

thank you so much for the sweet review my dear... : )

[Ana Papaya]

It was my pleasure. :)

[Manisha]

WOW...its amazing you have a excellent beauty in your poem which makes your poems wonderful.....

[Shabeeh Haider]

Oh, this is sad. Why did you do this?
The steps should not stop, the destination should be reached together but having said that life always has external factors that come into play.
I loved your use of adjectives here to describe the thoughts, "windy evening". "dewy grass', "curious eyes", "transparent droplets", it is always these descriptive words that give so much strength to ones thoughts.
Having said that you should go through it a few times to increase the flow of each line.
A poem should go very smooth and this is so wonderful that you can make it perfect.

[Anindita Janhabee]

Thank you so much sir, I really appreciate the way you went deep into the poem and wrote such a beautiful review... Actually I was about to extend the poem but certain things made my mind totally diverted. Therefore I had to stop...

[Shabeeh Haider]

Ah, this diversion......