Body within

Body within

A Chapter by Ashley.M.E

Without my eyes

I can not see

Without my lips

I can not speak

Without my ears

I can not hear

Without my hands

I can not feel

 

Without any senses

Just a voice in the wind

No different than the others

The difference comes from with in

 

I see who you are

You see who I am

Without the face

The skin

The eyes

The voice

The looks

 

Now you know me

And I know you

For all you are

In your mind

The soul within

Without a disguise

You are open

As am I

For I can see you

Without my eyes

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This has got to be the most profound and beautiful piece of poetry i've ever read. It tells of the strongest bond that people can share...that of simply knowing... like an invisible thread of connection that says more than any mere sense can share.
I loved the way this piece smoothly brings us to a common cosmic truth.

Fantastic Ashley!
Hugs!
Wolfie

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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wow, i love it :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Intensely personal write. I really liked this poem, so bare and raw, breaking everything down to the most naked essential. Great flow and rhythm to this as well. I do have to comment and say that "With out" and "can not" are much more aesthetically pleasing and grammatically proper if they are combined into one word. You have without combined in all lines but the first three it is used in. Other than that, great poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This has got to be the most profound and beautiful piece of poetry i've ever read. It tells of the strongest bond that people can share...that of simply knowing... like an invisible thread of connection that says more than any mere sense can share.
I loved the way this piece smoothly brings us to a common cosmic truth.

Fantastic Ashley!
Hugs!
Wolfie

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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There is a very strange style in your writing that I haven't seen before. I like it how you introduce the senses and some feelings that humans have and made me think a lot about what you wrote.
-code241

Posted 10 Years Ago


I can feel the humanity in this. Vulnerable, pale, shaking,humanity. I love the honesty portrayed, and the rhythm was great, but best at the start and at the finish.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Very human. Nice and very intriguing. Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Its very interesting. Going back to the base of every thing. Every human thought, every bottom feeling. Im not sure I like how you did it, maybe its because I'm just a short story kind of girl. Thank you for sharing it.
Rain

Posted 10 Years Ago


insightful piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wow! THis was really powerful. For I can see you Without my eyes! That's my favorite liine. Thanks for sharing. This was fantastic!
!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


I love this don't get me wrong very well done but i think you could take out the lines in the beginning... i think it might just hit the reader a little harder like that of course by all means do not do that because even if you don't it's great that's just my opinion!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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