Don't say goodbye

Times running out on us.
I came back too late.
I hope to stay with you until the first snow.
So I can wear those socks that you bought me.
But I will die before that,because of you.
I know it hurts for you to be with me.
But I love you.

Look at me.

 

It is just the beginning .
It will hurt more later.
You will hurt more than me.

 

 

I wish I'd hurt for you.
Don't take me suddenly.
Give me enough time
to say goodbye.

 

 

Fool.If it hurts,scream.
Hold me and cry.
Don't try to hide it.
It hurts me so much.
I feel as if I'd die before you!
My heart.. It's broken.
Because I love you enough
for my heart to burn.
Medicine doesn't work anymore.

 

 

It is raining.
The rain can't cool down
my love for you.

 

Come on,don't follow me
into my dreams.

 

When I am with you at night
it feels as if it were day.

 

Now I believe that phrase

that you can see with eyes closed.

 

I am still waiting for that day to come...

Don't say goodbye. . .

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

"Times running out on us." Should be "Time's"

"I hope to stay with you until the first snow.
So I can wear those socks that you bought me." I like these lines. Something so simple that means so much. It's the small things that mean a lot.

"Come on,don't follow me" I like the contrast within this one line.

Although this isn't my favorite poem of yours, I like it. Saying goodbye is a hard thing, and you got the heartbreak and difficulty of it across well. Good job.

[Brianna Brie]

Yikes...your words stab the heart. Guess I can relate all too well. Great poem!

[Chris38]

This was a great poem. Loved it.

[trainwreck]

Raw emotion is a really great style. There are a couple typos, but they didn't stop me from being drawn in. Great job.

[Zoe Jay]

Mind your punctuation. Otherwise, a strong write, raw and emotional. It brings out the darker side of love, sadness and pain and desperation not to lose what we have found. An honest poem.

[?]

Very nice, sad, pouring out of emotions

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Very sad,but wonderful descriptions~

[Calypso]

Sad, but well written. So beautiful.

[Rose Masen]

Very raw and straight to the point with a hint of a hidden message behind it. You didn't give it all away, yet you gave enough to keep the reader, reading, and their mind wheeling with the blatant emotions within.

[hannajade]

Awesome write!! In some area's the flow is a bit off and there is a few grammar problems.... but you still great:)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

:(