Numb

When we fall, we need lot of courage to stand up.. this poem shows the pain inside us...

 
         Huge scream

      Heavy noise

      High tension

      Large Illusion

      Long pain

      Little darkness

     Afraid to lose

     Taking risks

     Lot of Expectations

 

     Why I am afraid

     I don't know, I can't see

     I am my worst enemy

 

     You look around and all you see is hurt

     And I am the one who can't be saved

     Hiding myself behind the caves

     People asking me questions

     and I have nothing to enunciate

     Life is too short ,

     Lot of decisions to make

     Good things come to those who wait

     I am running out of space

     I stayed where my last step left me

     Maybe I am the one to blame

       Maybe we are all same...

 

Author's Note

Read it tell me what you think about it...
I have written a poem after a long time..
I hope you will like it:)

Reviews

[Frieda P]

This poem makes a lot of noise, and raises many questions....we are all one in the same, it takes courage to wake up in the morning and look at ourselves, just to breathe each day can be a challenge. I think you've connected the dots with this one! Nice....

[Akshat♥]

Thank you:)

[Anuvart]

We all feel this way at some point in our life..
thank you for for sharing :)

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Hitman]

Nice message behind this write..
Keep writing!!

[Akshat♥]

Thank you:)

[sudeshna]

true.. we are our worst enemy and if we want we can be our best friend... so yes we are all same... nice work buddy

[Akshat♥]

Thank you:)

[amdc101]

I love all the feelings and noises that in a way make me feel surrounded by the poem if that makes sense...I l like what you did with all the colors too...it really brought out the separate feelings and ideas in the poem.

[Akshat♥]

Yes,you are right in some way..
Thank you:)

[ms. barrie]

very inspiring, encouraging write here, my favorite lines:

Large Illusion
Long pain
Little darkness

Afraid to lose
Taking risks
Lot of Expectations

Why I am afraid
I don't know, I can't see
I am my worst enemy

and:

the last stanza...written with eloquent profoundness, great poem :)

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[ms. barrie]

you welcome ;)

[DIVYA]

Great thoughst coming there...thought may be with a touch of dark. I dont see any very recent posts. Why have you stopped writing? Please give us some more good reads. :)

[Akshat♥]

For me writing a poem means thinking deep with emotions & in that case i need lot of time..although i'm trying..hope to write soon..thanks for the review :)

[devon]

Very emotion-filled, very good! I like that it speaks of courage, and standing back on your feet after being knocked to the ground. :)

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[devon]

Of course!

[what-the-frick]

Incredible and dripping with emotion!

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Melissa Edmunds]

This is really good very enjoyable. Very well written..

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)