Act I

I was bored to death. Why would'nt I, as could see only white land, white sky, even the sun was freaking white. I don't know how I landed in this goddamn place; or how I I've been here. But I could tell one thing: I've been stuck up in this place for almost eternity. And this was bad, because I was forgetting almost everything. I didn't remember my own name, I was starting to even forget what the word "name" meant. This place was super weird, or I had beginning to think I was; I never got hungry, tired or sleepy. When I used to get bored, I used to force myself to sleep. When I used to shut my eyes, I felt calm, peaceful, at bliss. The "white" was starting to hurt my eyes. I entered a different world from "white", which was quite the opposite. And after a while, I used to see these " images".....wait, what was the word for it; ya...."dreams" if I remember it correctly. There were so many different colours aside white. In my dreams, I always used to see this boy and a girl, almost my age, though I never saw them in a same dream. I never remember any of my dreams. Remembering is not my speciality. But I think I knew them. Anyways, who cares. I don't give a s**t because there's nothing or nobody here to talk or think about. Only this doddamn sun which never f*****g sets, I thought. I hadn't even heard my own voice for a very long time. For the time being, I was resting near a big white rock, using it as a cushion. "Cushion" isn't the best way to describe, but I can't think of any other word.

"Hello !!!" I screamed loudly, so loud that my throat became dry. Again, I'm not a specialist in screaming. That scream, or yell, or whatever it might be, sounded pathetic, and I promised myself never to do it again; just like last time. I know nobody was there to respond, so I closed my eyes to enter the other world.
After a while I heard rhythmic sounds. I didn't make any sound, I thought. I opened my eyes. Nothing. Great ! Now I was losing my mental stability and has started "hearing things". I again closed my eyes. But the sound became clearer and clearer. I quickly opened my eyes and turned behind the rock towards the source of sound. It was a person. It was a girl. it was THE girl. The one from my dreams. Surely I don't remember my dreams, but it doesn't mean I forgot them completely. I rose up suddenly, saying " You're the girl from my dreams".
" So you still think about me ? " she said.
" What !?" I asked. She saw my face and somehow realised that she was wrong somewhere. Maybe she looked.... sad. Whatever.
" This place is so... 'white' !" she said.
"Ya...you like white? Cause this place is nothing but white." I kind of shouted.
"Do you want to get out of this place ?" she asked.
I looked at her helplessly. Could this girl, wearing weird clothes, so weird that can't even describe, actually help me ? I thought myself. Well, what's the harm in trying ?
"Absolutely" I finally replied.
"This might hurt, ok ? "
"What ?" said I, as she came near me. What the hell is she gonna do ? She lifted her left hand and placed it on my right cheek; that felt weird. But the next moment my body started shredding the very next second. OK, I summarized. Weird girl comes in, does some weird thing, weird thing starts happening to me. That figures. I was cool until the pain started kicking in. That feeling was new to me. Or that I'd forgotten how it felt to be "hurt". But slowly, I started seeing these images, which made no sense to me, and the pain was too overwhelming for me to logically think. Then, I passed out. Luckily.

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The content sure is interesting, but the writing lacks style. Try not to write it in such a colloquial way. It is very important - this way it is written in a way similar to a random online chat and that's not what a reader is looking for. And there are also numerous typos, though that's not that much of a problem. So, yep, it's interesting, but it could be far better.