Swamp Lilly (also known as Turk Cap Lilly)

Swamp Lilly (also known as Turk Cap Lilly)

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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lilies many times represent purity, innocence and virtue and so is used here in contrast to the poem.

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                                       "Swamp Lilly"

Orange soot horizon waves a grey mirage

  A decoration of a morass midden rule
    Our reds whites and blues subdued
      middle ground's torn decoupage
         from left to right is skewed

            sustaining such distance
              harsh flesh is strewn
                 Rant rift railings
                   rising in tune

                    holding you
                      tightly in
                         lieu

7/20
E.
                                

© 2020 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
This form is one of Richards originals:
"NABLA DEL"
an original poetic form
created by Richard W. Jenkins
© 12 Dec 2001

In the shape of an upside down (inverted) triangle, this form must be centered for full effect, but may be aligned left or right when formatting will not permit center alignment.
There is no set syllable count per line, but each descending line must be reduced by (at least) two letters, until there is one word at the bottom, and a smooth sided inverted triangle has been produced.
12 Lines total are required in the following order:
1 … Opening/Introduction Line
2 … Quatrains (4-Line verses)
1 … 3-Line Closing Verse (triplet)
Rhyme scheme is: x, xbxb, xcxc, xxx (x = no rhyme). But, by author's choice, there can be more rhymes, as long as the required minimum rhyme scheme is met. A space between L1, each quatrain and the closing 3 lines is also required to meet Richard's form.


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So pleased I waited to view on my computer rather than phone. The splendid form was completely lost on a small screen. Now I can see it in all its inverted perfection and magnificent it looks too. I have never attempted a poem which has such a visual impact with its words. So clever. I love your lilies. We have some in our garden. I have always called them tiger lilies. They remind me of one of the characters in Rupert Bear stories I used to read a long, long time ago. Tiger Lily was a Chinese friend of Ruperts. As for the poem itself, I see this as being a statement of the political situation in your country. Extremes on both political sides, red and blue and the middle ground is left infertile. Not a healthy situation and quite a contrast in comparison to the purity of your lilies. Politics can stink at times. Happy Independence day Mr E. Hope you are having a very happy day, despite the politics and the covid. Sending my best to you. We have similar extremes over here.

Chris

Posted 1 Year Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

spot on Chris! that's exactly what I was trying to convey .. the middle ground use to be the place w.. read more
Chris Shaw

1 Year Ago

Good for you :)



Reviews

I love the poem and the form...that looks rather challenging. Yet you make it look easy! ~Sharon

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

thank you Sharon .. glad you liked it... strict forms are very challenging for me anyway .. Richard .. read more
I just noticed that I missed some of your poems, I was reading and will try to leave my words beneath them, a very lovely shaped poem dear E, You did a great job here.

Posted 5 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

5 Months Ago

thanks Light .. for taking time to look around me pages! This is a form is one that Richard created .. read more
Light

5 Months Ago

"very restrictive to hold to the form and still make some sense of something" yes and that's the KEY.. read more
An wonderfully visual form. Can’t be easy to do. Your poem says it like it is. Day after day political pollution and more. It is so disheartening.There is nothing much anymore that even echos middle ground or reason. It’s sad. Brilliantly expressed.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

thank you for reviewing m'Lady ;) i am gratified this comes across clearly for you ... and, of cours.. read more
A wonderful poem for the swamp lily. I liked the photo too. We have the river lilies and the river wildflowers in Michigan. So beautiful. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

glad you enjoyed the read John .. and thank you for taking time to leave your comments .. love and p.. read more
Coyote Poetry

11 Months Ago

Always my pleasure to read your work. I will semi-retire in October. More time to read and write. Yo.. read more
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

congratulations Coyote John! I am happy for you .. I have been fully retired for about 7 yrs.. i lov.. read more
The title got me since it's my favourite flower :)
The form is alluring but so are the words!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

hi Sara! what a delight to have your visit .. they are pretty bold flowers aren't they! growing up t.. read more
Sara

11 Months Ago

Yes, my garden is full of them! there's a species called Lilium carniolicum (https://en.wikipedia.or.. read more
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

yes ...she is .. lately her "nephew" Beauregard has been showing some of her behaviors ... yes...i b.. read more
could be a top spinning, I bet Richard is impressed that you remembered the exact date, and that you included the copywrite symbol, in lieu of what or whom begs the question :D It kinda has a political flare but then ends on a romantic note, mmmm love and politics, a debate with these topics could feel more like a twister than a top :P

Posted 11 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

hi Corset! thanks for taking time .. as to top or twister ... the both spin don't they ;) its politi.. read more
Corset

11 Months Ago

maybe it was the last stanza
Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

:) ................
Fantastic! Such a clever piece, and so fascinating to look at. Lovely imagery.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

thanks for stopping by LouBelle! I appreciate you taking time to read comment ..glad you enjoyed .. .. read more
Loved this innovative form! Even more, the starkly different way the beautiful flower is viewed here through your poetic lense, taking a welcome break from the norm. All in all, a stunning poem, visually and literally, dear E!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

11 Months Ago

thanks so much for your kind words .. much appreciated my friend ... and again . so happy you are fi.. read more
WOW (not a word I often use), Gene!

You've taken this challenging Shape/Concrete Form and created a virtual little masterpiece, making it your own in your always thought-provoking style. And, it's inverted delta shape is spot-on … simply marvelous!
What an honor it sincerely is to have a poet of your stature and popularity compose in one of my forms, performing such an excellently laid out and presented result … love your picture choice of the Turk's Turbans, too. The title, "Swamp Lilly", is far more fetching, though, I think. Plus, the imagery of your always grammatically mystifying syntax paints an impacting political picture in the mind and heart.

KUDOS to you, My Friend, for a successful challenge, well accepted and done! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 12 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

12 Months Ago

life is complete now sir!! ;) but you well know it would not be so fit to form had you not offered y.. read more
Richard 🍃

12 Months Ago

Peace and joy to Thee, as-well, My Friend ✌
Hmmmm Richard is holding out on me! LOL I have not seen this form of his. But, how wonderfully you composed this! Your wording is lovely ( as so is this lilly) Visually stunning and so well done! Thank you kindly for sharing :-)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

and thank you for visiting Susan ... your avatar brings me such a joy .. each time i see it! it exud.. read more

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