Still a Mystery

A

woman

stares at me

in  the  mirror

I do not know her

as well as one would think

She    is     still     a     mystery

wrapped in a cloak of confidence

Reviews

[Stella Armour]

you can only see a reflection of the true person not the values..

[Rita L. Sev]

True. Thank you Stella

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

The mystery woman in the mirror...I've seen her before myself. Only, my mystery woman tends to look more like me, nervous and unsure. I think if I could see that cloak of confidence I may just be able to reach through the void and wrap it around my own shoulders, but it's never that easy. A stark picture you paint here, and I rather like the pyramid structure, because for some reason it reminds me of enlightenment. Well done.

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sarah. Yes, some days that cloak is more protective than others... and out in the world, it's only there for show...

[TrimarcoRansome]

Brilliantly composed, the layout reminded me of the Maslow's hierarchy of needs theory which fitted so adeptly to the topic. We need to tend our inner selves as much as we tend what others see! Beautifully written as always

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you - I did not think of Maslow's hierarchy, but it does fit... great insight!

[Talal Hussain]

Very well composed Rita :-)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Talal

[Sami Khalil]

The ever talented Rita and the ever great writes. I love this one...:)

[Rita L. Sev]

Thank you, Sami! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Angel]

I don't know the gal in my mirror at all...
Whatever happened to the pretty young girl who used to live in there?
The woman in there now is definitely getting older...putting on weight...got some lines around her eyes and mouth...
And her cloak of confidence is frayed at the edges.

[Rita L. Sev]

Hmmm... seems you need to have a talk with her. The young girl is still there, but wiser now (remember?) ;)

[Angel]

LOL...I'm still working on the wiser part, my dear.
Let's just say I'm Once Bit And Twice Shy, Babe...

[ShelleyA]

Hi Rita. A good write about what you see in the eyes of your reflection. Introspective and thoughtful. A well crafted Shape poem. I like how you start line one with 1 syllable and each consecutive line you add another syllable, ending in line eight being 8 syllables. Flow is good as is the line to line transition and breaks. Good depth of feeling. I think we can all relate to the mystery that we sometimes see when we stare at our reflections. Well penned. Write on!

[Rita L. Sev]

Thanks, Shelley. I started this thinking it would become a reverse Etheree, but I liked that last line as the conclusion.

[ShelleyA]

You're welcome Rita. I like it the way it is. That last line is excellent.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the way this poem is built...

like the mirror is swallowing the woman and this is the reflection.

nicely done.

i wonder if we ever really know ourselves.

jacob

[Rita L. Sev]

I try... then Life changes, so I change. That is the essence of Life, I suppose... Thank you, Jacob.