turning purple

on conversations with Poppy.

turning purple
writhing on the floor
the participle
hangs in the balance
begging for more --
more space to conjugate
more adjectives to deliberate
more non restrictive clauses
to offer pregnant pauses ...
she will not tolerate
the ones who relegate
her to the corners of the mind
poets take heed
there is a need
to treat her in kind
or you will find
hell hath no wrath
like a neglected metaphor ...

Author's Note

Thank you Poppy, for inspiring me.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

well you know the English teacher in me loves this one...thanks for the amusement...neglected metaphors can really be a handful to deal with.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks so much. I had fun.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha made me laugh Kit Kat .Writers beware yes lol

[Lyn Anderson]

That metaphor's a Crazy b***h but she's fun, kinda like cats and angels...

[Vidya Bacchus]

You know it cat :)

[s y e]

Ooooooooft! HA, this made me laugh so much! I have no words for this one really, LOL! You sure know how to make me laugh.

[Lyn Anderson]

Glad to ticlkle your writer's funny bone

[ron]

OMG this is soooo funny,, I pulled out before I paused so I know it can't be mine...:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Great line Ron. Thanks

[ron]

You just had to put in the "pregnant pauses" I couldn't resist :)

[Sami Khalil]

I always leave your poems with thought provoking ideas and realistic expectations of life in general. The truth in your words set the minds free...Excellent...:)................

[Lyn Anderson]

Thank you so much.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)........................

[Ruth]

Hate those neglected metaphors - who cares if the dishes are halfway up the wall or the family needs another slice of cake or the clothes need washing or the damn bed is unmade! Words have their place and pick their moments and always get their way! lol A Poet's world is a world of must! ;) My pleasure darling, you took it to a whole new level, laughing here love x

[Lyn Anderson]

I am glad you enjoyed. I agree. Dishes be damned.:)

[Ruth]

And have to say, metaphor is superb here :)

[Madalyn Beck]

Oh, oh, oh! I love this one! Very well written and thought out! You must have some great conversations with Poppy! Haha! xo (:

[Lyn Anderson]

Spurrr of the moment and off the cuff - her comments on my poetry binging. Nice to see you as always. I will read your chapter when I have time to dissect LOL.

[Madalyn Beck]

Hahaha! No worries my dear. I always trust you will when you can. (: