The Blonde Girl

A magnificently beautiful story ... Some might say that it was sad to read, and did not have a happy ending ... But I say, this story is perfect in that perfect timing of two people meeting, clueless that they would ever meet, who needed someone special in their lives at that precise moment in time. She gave you something no one else ever could have, and you gave her more than you will ever know, even though you do know ... This story is tender and touching to the very core of any heart that has ever had a first crush or first love, especially someone as special as I see that she was to you ... And you to her ... A wonderful memorial to her memory in keeping her memory alive ... Thank you for sharing ... Very well written ...

Posted 9 Years Ago

a touching story... there are a few grammatical errors.. but a good job otherwise.. simple and direct as children are apt to be..

Posted 8 Years Ago

great read, KEEP writing. such a beautiful story. I loved it.

Posted 8 Years Ago

Sad story but good. Keep writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago

a good story and touches. you write every word very precisely. and in this story I'm picking one thing, " that is not joy or happiness, but misery and suffering that makes us unite " ;)

Posted 8 Years Ago

You like so many of us have stories to tell, and good stories too. And like many of us, the more we write and read the better we become at conveying these stories. Keep climbing kid.

Posted 8 Years Ago

It's got a good heart and it's definitely a start. Maybe try to fix up your grammar and description. Nice write!

Posted 8 Years Ago

Sweet writing, cant wait to see the video

Posted 8 Years Ago

Good Story.
This seems like a first draft which can use a good amount of improvement. However, I understand the story you were trying to write and I feel like you should definitely work on perfecting it. It's a good story. I would love to read the more polished version of this. It felt a bit auto-biographical, which makes it even more authentic. Definitely keep up with this. I feel like characters like these aren't published enough in the media today.

Posted 8 Years Ago

The story was beautifully written and expressed emotion and feelings most don't get to in writing. This is a wonderful piece in memory of a friend

Posted 8 Years Ago

wow!
just wow, this was so damn beautiful and literally it brought tears to my eyes..
she was the like the light in this moment, i absolutely loved it. T'was so sad when they both told each other that they loved each other, and then dang she died :'( like no no, so sad but also a beautiful story.
great job!!
-Amy

Posted 8 Years Ago