Wish I Was

Wish I was the breeze
Floating by
Gliding over land and sea
Free and easy
Seeing you there
I would kiss your face

Wish I was an Eagle
On warm golden air
An overlord of bronze
With all seeing eyes
I would swoop down
And take you to the clouds

Wish I was the ocean
With power all around
Ever fresh and surging
Forever at your shores
Trying to reach you and
Dying on your beaches

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

I like the anaphora you used to introduce each stanza and the final couplet is excellent.

Winston

[R J Askew]

Wistfully, tersely, vividly beautiful.

[DeaconHitchbight]

For some reason, I wanted to read the second stanza before the first...
Both were a perfect approach to that final line.
A good read!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Fabulous! This is very romantic and well crafted. One can feel the devotion and longing in the words. Great write, my friend. F.

[Betty Hermelee]

Beautiful imagery describing the different ways to pluck your love, whether from the ocean's power, the breeze flowing by, an eagle who could swoop down and lift her gently,.....even "dying on your beaches"
Very powerful and well done!
Best, Betty

[K writes]

This is amazing, very spiritual

[Lathen Griffiths]

This is lovely, I particularly liked the line ‘ Ever fresh and surging
Forever at your shores’. Really nice.

Lathen.

[Kerra]

Beautiful write here, so nicely expressed

[Chris Shaw]

This is a beautiful poem. Spiritual in its content. I love how you have introduced the natural environment. Your thoughts here echo my own. Lovely work.

Chris

[Shelley Warner]

I like how you use the imagery of the wind, an eagle, and the ocean to express love for a special person. I hope the ending lines don't indicate a sad ending to the romance.

[BL]

It was meant to be an open ending


Thanks

[Shelley Warner]

Nicely done