Exhale

an old poem ..Exhale is used many times over the years for many titles of all kinds of things .. i think it retains its allure and power, however ... just my opinion

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Exhale

My craving wailed;     

(banshee on the wind)

     gripping 

             petals,

     misting

             reason.

Whispers trace kisses,

                         fragmenting my thoughts.

Untamed--

          love lured me

     crimson,

          and purple.

                                        exhale.....................

                                                              ........................

                                                                              ................................................................................

E.

© 2013 Einstein Noodle

Author's Note

I read Seriana's poem "Exhale" https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/drushin703/2767099/#comment-4469383
and thought it would be fun to re-post mine .. they are so different in theme .. hope you like it .. let me know what you think Seriana! :)

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"Whispers trace kisses,
fragmenting my thoughts.
Untamed--
love lured me"...

And then..Wait for it....aaah, "exhale..................
Just so breathtaking (literally!) and sensual E. My heart added extra beats while reading. This is love as it should always be - teetering, suspended in the passion and heat of the moment before...just like your supremely expessive lines and perfect pauses...
Loved this hugely and thank you for pointing me to Seriana's poem as well my friend!

[Einstein Noodle]

you have made my day Annette! gave me a good feeling inside with your review .. yes .. we can get knocked for a loop and loose .. or we just may win ... all it takes is that "One" eh!? thank you so much!
E.

[barleygirl]

I love this . . . simple & flowing just like breath. I have to confess, when I was reading this, I had a hard time picturing YOU as writing it . . . often your writing seems so far from the person I get to know as a person (you!) . . . it's like this poet must be on a different planet, in all the best ways! Nice to read your background ideas about posting this & how it all connected for you. Here's hoping life is buoyant for you & yours. I do agree that some words can be used often by poets & still retain their spunk, while others wilt & grow cliche (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Einstein Noodle]

Well ......... i truly am honored you would pay such attention to the poetry i post ..we humans are most certainly multi-faceted and those of us who pursue artsy fartsy stuff perhaps more poignantly so .. we splash it all over our pages ;) this is an old one .. and simply about passion and how it may or may not turn out well for the passionate ;) not sure who the "YOU" of me is Margie :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) really happy you enjoyed and related .. peace my Barley Girl friend! St. Paddy's Day is upon us eh!? Slainte Mhath! and lift one with me will ya!? :)))
E.

[barleygirl]

Thank you for reminding about St Paddy's coming up . . . I'm still trying to remind myself to change my clocks next time I'm up! *smile*

[Einstein Noodle]

take the leap Barley Girl ... our sunshine lasts longer that way :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))

[Chris Shaw]

I caught your breath, felt your heart thumping and then exhale....... Untamed love certainly exercises the heart Mr E, as well as all the other parts. Crimson and purple, hot love colours, no pastel shades here. I caught your craving as well as your breath. Very sensual,. Banshee on the wind is genius. Liked your posted image too. Those fingers, reaching out to grasp under the light of the silvery moon :) Layout adds to the excitement. Good morning to you from across the wind swept waters.

Chris

[Einstein Noodle]

you nailed me intent in this one to a T Ms. Chris! thanks for you taking time on me streets always .. glad we "connected" through poetry .. right here at the Cafe' :)))))))))))))))))
E.

[Chris Shaw]

Always a pleasure when I take a walk on the forum to find you :) Have a great day :))

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you ... and back at ya! :)

[Chris Shaw]

:).................

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is being tackled by the love bug...the kisses fragmenting the thoughts...

been there, done that....couldn't get enough...was like Friar Lawrence had the right idea...

"love moderately, long love doth so"---I never could adhere to that when I was younger and more vulnerable. This brought me back....love the layout of it as well.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks jacob .. always for your reviews .. yeah .. youth and love are a mix of many things thrown together in the dryer .. left on spin cycle .. sometimes too long eh!? so now we just ... sigh...... and dream ... and love nature :))))))))))))))))
E.

[Neville]

... you can beat an egg, around the bush and a rug .. but ya can't beat the good old uns ... they are the best ... and these words made this reader gasp a little .. no kidding ............. they took my breath away ..

:)

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha well ... i certainly couldn't ask for a better review sir ... glad this "old one" could amp up the electricity a bit ... we ain't done yet are we?! love and joy Nev! peace and health to ya!
E.

[Neville]

and back at ya Gene ... am busy preparing to move house soo am not likely to be around that often for a while tho' shall pop in when able .. Take care and raise that glass 13.00 hrs my time on Sunday ........... N :)

[Einstein Noodle]

i'll be there! and again on the 17th ... all day :))))))))))))))))))))))) Éire go Brách

[Neville]

... :))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))))) : ...

[Nix is typing...]

(I've said this before but I want to emphasize it again) It's ALWAYS a pleasure reading you, Mr. Noodle!!! I really like how differently you format your poems....it's not just a straight line down, it's spacing and tabbing and "enter"ing which makes it all the more an interesting read! Such a short read...but so thought-provoking...Thank you for sharing your outstanding poetry!!! :)

Kindly, Nix ❤️️

[Einstein Noodle]

and thank you Nix! thank you very much!

[Nix is typing...]

You're so very welcome!! :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

zthat was amazing. I would call iy mysteriously romantic.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha .. well Rock-n-Roller! at my age your comment has made my day today .. i am in your debt .. and oh that crazy passion we call love .. it can knock us for a loop can't it!? ;) peace brother .. and thanks for reviewing
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Filled with desire and anticipation, your poem conjures images of two people drawn to one another. At least that is my interpretation. The ending makes it seem as though they finally did get together. Nice to re-post an oldie. Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

when i went looking for this and found it ..the date blew me away .. 2013 .. and i had been at the Cafe' at least several years before that .. how time flies ;) thanks for reviewing Lydi! yes .. the attraction .. how many stories have come after that eh!? love on ya :))))))))))))
E.

[Seriana]

Good morning! And what a lovely treat! Oh my, they are SOOOOO different. But this is akin to a sigh, and exasperated wait almost. I can feel the tension. It is though he (or she) is being lured, drawn to some unseen force and they can't quite reach it, sighing (exhaling) in exasperation.
"Untamed--
love lured me"
That line caught me. Had to read it several times. Could be taken several ways, but in the end I decided the writer was untamed, and therefore, love lured him in, giving in at last (exhale). Ha! I supposed it's fun for each author to read all the interpretations! Thank you for sharing this! It is, indeed, so very interesting to see the differences!

[Einstein Noodle]

oh yes ... we need to hear what everyone sees and thinks about our "stuff" eh!? for sure!! i love what you say "...this is akin to a sigh" ... and isn't it cool how different they are ... gotta love it right!? the line you stayed upon a bit .. is the important one to me ... so happy you took the time to review it ..thanks so much!
E.