unruddered

ahh, I had to get out of the dark some time, I was beginning to suffocate in there.

unruddered,
a raft drifts willingly
to an unknown shore.

unuttered,
words that trip harshly
and try to keep score.

uncluttered,
the mind absorbs perfectly;
yearning for more.

unshuttered,
the window allows lightly
through the opposite door.

and
a kiss that defies logic
changes everything
that went before.                                                                                                                                                                                                       

Reviews

[Ruth]

Opening those doors leads to cobwebs being blown free and we are sometimes surprised :) x

[Kai Rollins]

While I don't have the time tried wisdom of some. There's a certain precariousness to un. Lovely write

[Madalyn Beck]

Oh, the "un's" of life. I love this. It's so clear, flowing, upbeat, and just... beautiful. I truly enjoyed this write. xo (:

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks Maddy. Enjoy your stopping by as always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that which is unuttered is often unecessary to unleash...

undeniably we live and un-life sometimes...and it is what we don't do that matters more than what we do...

that does defy logic, like your kiss here, that went before.

nicely done.

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. I started with un, and went from there ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes that's all it takes...to get us going....a phrase, a word, or part of a word.

[Lifeofbennard]

This flowed quite well you said you needed to get the dark out.
Was this a experssion peice or just creative wrting?
If its expression id love to hear the full story haha.
Good write.
Peace

[Lyn Anderson]

Ahh, but isn't it always a little of both?

[Bluefire]

I like how you took words, rhymed them and told a story through them.
Cleverly done. ^^

[Lyn Anderson]

Thanks. As I said to Jacob, I just kind of started with un.

[Bluefire]

Amazing how to letters can be built into a poem. ^^ You're welcome!