A Battle for Love

A Battle for Love

A Chapter by R E Tree

Love is it a fight worth fighting for?


Soldiers armed

With weapons

The bullets are loaded

They march

An army of them

Anything in thier way

Won't see another day

I ran with my shaking legs

I stumble and fall

I then began to crawl

Through long thin grass

I try to hide myself

Their footsteps heavy

They shake the earth

Thier faces full of terror

Unpredictable in thier eyes

Thier helmits rock hard

They don't look heavy

But I bet they are


One man spots me

The leader high up on a horse

I hear bangs of bullets

They fly past me but miss me

My ears couldn't take the bangs

The leader screams

He instructs his men to surround me


The battle for your love

Oh why has recieving your love,

Turned into a heart pain?

I bet all this battling

Makes your love worthless, empty and weak

When will I earn it

When will you realise this is no game

Of losing and not recieving anything back

I promise I will love you too



© 2012 R E Tree

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This was a good poem. I liked how war was represented for love....cause war is nothing but pain and suffering...thanks for sharing...

Posted 13 Years Ago

The flow in this poem is a bit stunted. However you still keep the reader instrested.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Very good army poem

Posted 13 Years Ago

The imagery that I was able to see was awesome but your word choice makes it a little hard to move smoothly from one line to the next. Also, "thier" is supposed to be "their." and "A army" is supposed to be "An army."

Posted 13 Years Ago

Good imagery and a sharp correlation between the soldiers and bullets and the battle for love. A real good read. Fix the thiers and helmits. Real good ending.

Posted 13 Years Ago

" hear bangs of bullets
They fly past me but miss me" this didn't make much sense. It was very vivid, which I liked ;) but it had really awkward flow. I liked it but it wasn't a favorite of mine. Loved the whole, overall concept of the poem, just work on that flow. Keep writing.:)

Posted 13 Years Ago

I love how vivid it is... How I can see everything and everyone. It's incredibly meaningful and even touching. Heartwarming! Fantastic! Absolutely impressive.
"The battle for your love
Oh why has receiving your love
Turned into a heart pain?"

Loved it...

Posted 13 Years Ago

Definitely a great metaphor. Wonderful, strong imagery. Powerful, absolutely powerful. I love it.

Posted 13 Years Ago

Great metaphor. You wouldn't think love should be this way, but it is sometimes. Wonderful description of emotion here. Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago

That's totally beautiful!
Love as a battle fight, it's real.

Nice work!

Posted 13 Years Ago

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Added on June 13, 2010
Last Updated on June 28, 2012
Tags: army, love, battle, sweet, fight


R E Tree
R E Tree

West Yorkshire , United Kingdom

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