Chapter 1: Where It All Began, And Begins...

Chapter 1: Where It All Began, And Begins...

A Chapter by ewest1220
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He remembered this place. Like an almost non-existant dream...

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Chapter 1: “Where it all began, and begins...”


A young man approached the ruins of a small town. It was a bright warm day, the sun directly overhead. The town had been burned to the ground by an army of thousands, his master had told him. They had come to kill one of the damned but instead took hundreds of innocent lives in their wake.


He remembered this place. Like an almost non-existent dream. He pondered this feeling for but a second, then resumed his investigation.


As he walked through the debris and charred human remains he spotted what appeared to be a main road. He walked down it for a short bit and noticed something odd. An inn almost untouched by the surrounding violence was sitting at the end of the road. An eerie feel emanating from it's wooden walls.


Issak pulled back his hood slowly and stared at the forgotten building. His master had told him about this building. He had told Issak that the events that occurred here had resulted in him being sent to his master's school. But he couldn't help but think that there was something more to the story. Something his master had “forgotten” to say.


Issak stood around six feet tall, his eyes had faded to a deep dark brown but still shone that vivid blue every time he had one of his “episodes.” He wore a brown leather jacket, two long daggers lay sheathed within its folds. On his belt he had another weapon sheathed. A sword, nearly as long as he was tall. The blade was razor thin, straight, and single edged it was as unique as it was deadly for the metal was such that it did not break or shatter.


He reached down, his brown hair blowing in the breeze, and withdrew the long, thin sword from it's sheath. Gripping the blade in both hands he began to practice. He had spent 18 long years learning the art of the sword and he was not about to let himself forget how to use it. Especially considering all that he was.


Suddenly his mind fogged. His eyesight changed, a bright blue aura obscuring his vision. His body shook, and he felt his soul shatter as his power cam rushing to the surface. He opened his mouth to scream but fire filled it instead. The inferno blazed within his chest as his mind raced. And just as suddenly as the pain began, it ended. Gasping for air he watched in horror as the air around him ignited and the entire town exploded in a mass of fire and wind.


Issak stood there, exhausted by his loss of control. Leaning on his blade for support he peered around to see what had he had done.


The explosion had been much more powerful this time. What little remained of the town had been blown away into the surrounding hillside. Trees rent asunder by pieces of building and miscellaneous rubble that now littered the countryside.


“At least there wasn't anybody around,” he though miserably. “Nobody for me to kill...”


As if in answer to his statement he suddenly heard the desperate shriek of a woman in the distance. “Help me! Somebody! Please help me!”


“No!” Issak thought furiously as he sheathed his blade and broke into a dead run.


Issak sped along the path towards the voice. Her cries for help muffled by the obvious sound of a violent struggle.


Knowing full well the urgency of the situation Issak loosened his hold on the power. It radiated within him like a massive orb trapped in his chest. The power from the orb seeped into the rest of his body enhancing his strength, and most importantly, his speed.


He thundered along the path, an avalanche of death awaited. Yearning to be released on the unsuspecting rogues. He reached within himself, calling on the power to give life to the wind and leapt into the air. The force of the wind hurled him into the sky like a cannonball. And as he reached the peak of his jump he smiled softly. The avalanche was falling quickly on his unsuspecting prey. He unsheathed his blade and plunged toward his new victim. An almost sinister laugh lingering behind the force of his falling wrath.



© 2012 ewest1220


Author's Note

ewest1220
Alright this was copied straight from a written page so there may be typos. Please let me know where I can expand, what questions are unanswered or, really, any input you have on this book this has been a long time in the making. I have the entire book written I just need to translate it to text. Thank you guys so much for reading and for your support you guys are awesome!

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this story is so thrilling and interesting.making you to stick to it till the very end.i really liked this character .i don't know but i imagined him like "Clod" of Final Fantasy..he's totally coollll!!!!!!!!!....i'm so excited to read further........well.i can surely say one thing about it.....it would be a great supernatural story for me.........great work!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Awesome! I'm really glad you liked it! Thanks for reading Atiba Sheikh!



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Interesting flows so well and descriptions good.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Thanks! Glad you liked it!
oooh.... a build up of the setting. i like it ;)
it got straight to the action but still kept a good descriptive quality about it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!
i really cant see much to correct here , its a really great first chapter. i mean, its the writers preference as to whether it needs to be longer or shorter, but for me, i think it flowed nicely and came out perfectly. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Wow thanks! I'm really glad the first chapter worked out thank you so much for your input! I'm rea.. read more
I'm going to ignore any typos.
I like this, I read the piece about him being a baby the other day, a little quickly though.
He seems an interesting character and I'm curious as to what this power of his is, where does it come from and why him?
Well begun and please write it all down for us. ^_^

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

lol will do ^_^ thank you so much for reading I'm glad you liked it!
only one typo up top existant is existent oh and the word though i guess is thought
The story well told it flows beautifully You truly are gifted as a story teller the time line flows as well .I even liked the story that's unusual for me .I usually don't read stories because they aren't interesting enough this was great bravo

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Thanks! I'm really glad you enjoyed it Tate Morgan thank you so much for reading!
Tate Morgan

11 Years Ago

You are welcome
Holycow that was thrilling and i loved how you describe the setting and the main character. Issak sounds pretty cool, you are an amzing writer. What has inspired you to write and where did u learn to write?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mariah Corey

11 Years Ago

wow, your teacher was the best. Thank you for writing and showing your talent to the world. :D
ewest1220

11 Years Ago

and thank you for your kind words :)
Mariah Corey

11 Years Ago

np. usually i am not very good with saying kind things. but i am glad u like it. :D
I can appreciate the poetic quality in this novel format, based on my personal style, so I empathize with this rather unconventional but beautiful manner, in my own mind. I welcome reading someone's work that shares this rare connection with mine, because I have not seen it often, and am very poetic by nature, so . . . it speaks to me very strongly.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Wow thank you! I'm really glad you can relate to my style of writing and would be thrilled if you r.. read more
A great whirlwind of natural forces spiral furiously around me in rich sense detail as I read this. This piece always has a flow the moves beneath me as I read, fluently and tirelessly, but surprisingly, still filled with action, and, in this, of course- power . . . it is nearly poetic, but, simultaneously, it is like rain, for it falls, in a continuous stream, unbroken by all of the turbulence. It's a rain that is fluid and lovely, but is not separate from the thunder and ferocious lightning . . . excellent!


Posted 11 Years Ago


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ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Wow thank you so much for the magnificent review! It's always a pleasure to hear from you Foxmerald.. read more
Really good write here.
F**k the typos man.
Gut punching and hanjobby work here.
Me loves me some of this.

P. J. P.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Thanks man I'm glad you liked it!
Justin Flume

11 Years Ago

No problem!
I really like this! you're so talented! Great story line, can't wait to read more!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ewest1220

11 Years Ago

Thanks! I'm really glad you liked it!

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